Hey there!

It looks like you're enjoying Rap Battles Forum but haven't created an account yet. Why not take a minute to register for your own free account now? As a member you get free access to all of our forums and posts plus the ability to post your own messages, communicate directly with other members and much more. Register now!

Already a member? Login at the top of this page to stop seeing this message.

User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 15 of 15

Thread: The Two Faced Angel.

  1. #1
    Innovator.
    Join Date
    Apr 2004
    Age
    38
    Posts
    3,990
    Battle Record
    1-1

    The Two Faced Angel.

    In spite of preachers.
    Most don't deserve this title either.
    Cause despite believers you see the lies in bible beaters.
    Mindless teasers who use tithes to prescribe the seekers.
    Ride with Jesus but at night you supply the reefer.
    And despite deceivers we still walk around as liars, cheaters.
    Mesmerized by the ice, price, rides, and sneakers.
    Psyched and eager just to be beside this creature.
    Stigmatized cuz you're paying a price that applies to neither;
    Of these sleepless streets where niggas succeed to be.
    A piece of meat steady frontin rocking a Jesus piece.
    Jewels to relieve the heat, and we never ask to stop it.
    Get some cash to profit, imbedded cross from our tattoo artist.
    But we lack so this plaque is tarnished cuz of immoral acts.
    Where being invincible is a goal and proceed with immortal tasks.
    The force, the path we're given a shameless fate.
    And the only biblical line we keep in mind: That we can make mistakes!
    So you blame and hate sometimes change and relate.
    Face to face behind closed doors from state to state.
    Life raised the stakes and now there's no flesh to trust.
    This is a test for us while our bible's collecting dust.

    -Nique.
    AI. Legendary.
    19x HOF. Seven Titles. 50.

  2. #2

  3. #3
    Banned Percept's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2005
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,032
    Battle Record
    30-3
    this was nice, it had a great flow and the multies blended with the story very well...... it flowed nicely adn the vocab was verfy nice, it had a good message, overall i liked how you played with the topic, good piece nique, and peep my drop I STAND AT THE GRAVE the link is in my sig

  4. #4
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Dec 2005
    Location
    ......
    Age
    22
    Posts
    294
    Battle Record
    2-1
    o my goodnes this is 1 of the best of read on this site in my 2 years being here......i take it ur religous wich is good.......any who good work mos dif

  5. #5
    Banned Percept's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2005
    Age
    36
    Posts
    1,032
    Battle Record
    30-3
    rofl at 2 years being here

  6. #6
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Dec 2005
    Location
    ......
    Age
    22
    Posts
    294
    Battle Record
    2-1
    rofl at 2 years being here
    alias........dumb fuck................nice piece

  7. #7
    Innovator.
    Join Date
    Apr 2004
    Age
    38
    Posts
    3,990
    Battle Record
    1-1
    rise.
    AI. Legendary.
    19x HOF. Seven Titles. 50.

  8. #8
    Banned
    Join Date
    Dec 2005
    Age
    33
    Posts
    568
    Battle Record
    5-1
    Its like this Niq ..

    .. Nice title, dope concept. Good usege of words here. I greatly enjoyed this nice short read. It was short and sweet if you know what I meen, not to long, not to short, just about perfect. Lines were not stretched at all, this was an all around well sounded peice. The multies here were your strong point, the flow, it just went right along like reading a book with no commas, no choppy'ness, I read right through it. The imagiry was alright, you got your point across, and it was enough to think and picture inside my head what you were trying to tell me, but, you could have re-worded some stuff here and there to make it even better. Structure was on point, structure doesnt really meen anything when it comes to this stuff, because, all it matters is how well its written, how its written, all that.

    Overall, good, hard drop. I enjoyed this, and you did a very good job. Im looking forward to seeing more stuff from you dropped in the Open Mic, or possibly Poetic Scriptures of some sort, great peice none the less. Keep it up.

  9. #9
    Merk Squad
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Location
    Los Angeles
    Posts
    12,831
    Battle Record
    52-32
    Awards Legendary Battle Haymaker Maddnes Champion - HM 3 winner 50+ Wins Legendary Member OM HOF LLL Champion LLL Season Champion LLL HOF
    I liked this, well put together. The only thing I didn't like was the 'Jesus piece' phrase, cuz they've beaten that to death commercially.. but your usage was warrented, so all in all nice. I agree with your feelings in this as well

  10. #10
    Innovator.
    Join Date
    Apr 2004
    Age
    38
    Posts
    3,990
    Battle Record
    1-1
    rise.
    AI. Legendary.
    19x HOF. Seven Titles. 50.

  11. #11
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    :/
    Age
    37
    Posts
    145
    this is an awesome verse... ive seen a lot of people do the whole 2 faced thing but you did it well... first, you showed good, real, raw, and factual points to life. Second, you imagry was very well put together. Your rhyme scheme was good and your multis were great... you went a long time with the same rhyme the first few bars. Thats a bit more that id do with my style but still, it was good...
    ive nothing to hit back so no worries...
    good verse...

  12. #12
    Newbie
    Join Date
    Dec 2005
    Location
    Elverum
    Age
    35
    Posts
    13
    Nice verse, nice rhyming some places.

    all in all a decent verse.
    N-O-R-W-A-Y


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    Fucking with reality EP Coming soon

  13. #13
    Banned
    Join Date
    Oct 2003
    Posts
    5,480
    Battle Record
    12-1
    damn this was a real tight peice...th topic was so creative and very interesting and ya imagery was really tight and the vocab was also tight and complex all good..rhymes werre good..multies were too....flow was wicked smooth and strucutre was tight as well...overall this was tight....peace--

  14. #14
    Ra-Phanes
    Guest
    hot drop. "unique" topic ya choose. lol get it unique n ur nique. okay back to da piece. nice use of words. good flow. multis were there which delivered good flow. onloy thing i could say to improve it is some re wording of words. that would have made ya lines come off better wit da reader. but a nice creative piece
    keep it up

  15. #15
    Innovator.
    Join Date
    Apr 2004
    Age
    38
    Posts
    3,990
    Battle Record
    1-1
    Yes, I get it. That used to be my rap board name. Unique. But thanks, and rise like Jesus Christ.
    AI. Legendary.
    19x HOF. Seven Titles. 50.

Similar Threads

  1. somebody i haven't faced yet.
    By Fatal. in forum Bitch Slap!
    Replies: 9
    Last Post: November 29th, 2011, 04:27 PM
  2. Shit faced in Vegas
    By El Chapo in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: September 25th, 2010, 07:08 PM
  3. 2 faced niggaz
    By ~flOw cOnductOr~ in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: November 21st, 2005, 11:54 AM
  4. Two Faced Hero
    By Judge Judy in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 10
    Last Post: May 31st, 2005, 02:23 PM
  5. Dealing with 2 faced.....
    By Q.S in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 10
    Last Post: September 15th, 2004, 08:06 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •