Demon Pyrokronix (1-0) vs Nib Oswald (1-0)

[Aines]

LLL Jr. Week 2

Word

first week went kinda well no shows are gone and cats who showed and who signed up are now in...

same as last week check by wednesday drop by friday come good....if your opponent fails to check but shows then that will be allowed but they will be deducted 2 votes for failure to check.....
so all in all you MUST drop a verse this week.....

last of all voting.....im scrapping the 4 links this week, unless voting activity goes then this is how it will stay and if i catch anyone feeding off the first vote you will have votes deducted...constant offence then i'll boot your ass from the league.....


good luck all

[Nib Oswald]

Ow.
Checkin'... you choose word limit.

[Demon Pyrokronix]

I'll go 12, if you want more tell me.

[Nib Oswald]

(Edit) Votes:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=250643&page=1
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250615
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...0&page=2&pp=20
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...3&page=2&pp=20

Is 14 lines cool?

I don't spit with fresh breath, but my death threats will turn you to mince
Since D's a pounce, I stamped his face and left it covered with Prince
Hint Pyro wins? Get ripped to bits- guys, don't try jumpin' the shark
This powerless coward's fightin' fire with jumper-lead sparks
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'
You can see men hire colonics off Dame Demon Pyrokronix
Claims he's had a gutful of me... my semen lines his stomach
Demon's too drunk off his 'drops' that 'plonk' to flow when he's sober
Here's me at the bottom of the hill- with D going over
Hoover and Paris Hilton must sponsour him to suck 'n' blow
Not since Bad Santa have I heard such a motherfuckin' ho
An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.

[Marvelous_]

An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.

omg wow. thats like perfect too.. exactly his name.. LMFAO

[Demon Pyrokronix]

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
Yeah you're reppin IJL, shit ain't gonna trouble me see
Coz I ain't seen such a wack roster since The Rock and Golberg left WE
Fuck are you buryin me, kid you're just postin bull
Coz you're like the ONLY dude in this league who's NEVER had a quotable
IJL? Maybe you think they're dope, but I guess that's natural
But even Tom could see that Cruise more overated than he was in Collateral
You're a fuckin disgrace, now watch as I drown you in ointment
Coz you drop so much garbage you'll raise street cleaner employment
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards

[DaTrusHurtz]

I don't spit with fresh breath, but my death threats will turn you to mince
Since D's a pounce, I stamped his face and left it covered with Prince
just a statement really, no punch
Hint Pyro wins? Get ripped to bits- guys, don't try jumpin' the shark
This powerless coward's fightin' fire with jumper-lead sparks
If you had reworded to be more like "he's the type to put out fire with... or like the last time he put out fire he... " make it in the form of a punch
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'
Calling him a cheesy cunt isn't much of a diss lol
You can see men hire colonics off Dame Demon Pyrokronix
Claims he's had a gutful of me... my semen lines his stomach
gutful coulda been used as wordplay, but nah, didn't like this
Demon's too drunk off his 'drops' that 'plonk' to flow when he's sober
Here's me at the bottom of the hill- with D going over
nah, another statement
Hoover and Paris Hilton must sponsour him to suck 'n' blow
Not since Bad Santa have I heard such a motherfuckin' ho
actually not a bad concept of Bad Santa, but coulda done more with it
An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.
I give ya props on being creative, but honestly, it's kinda sad you spent the time to figure that out, lol

vs.

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
word, hits nicely only cuz it's true
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
saw this line recently somewhere else... lol j/k, not bad
Yeah you're reppin IJL, shit ain't gonna trouble me see
Coz I ain't seen such a wack roster since The Rock and Golberg left WE
like, simile type punches are often weak, this kinda fell into that category
Fuck are you buryin me, kid you're just postin bull
Coz you're like the ONLY dude in this league who's NEVER had a quotable
pretty basic, i guess it works since it's true
IJL? Maybe you think they're dope, but I guess that's natural
But even Tom could see that Cruise more overated than he was in Collateral
Haven't seen this before, but the overall punch of it wasn't strong
You're a fuckin disgrace, now watch as I drown you in ointment
Coz you drop so much garbage you'll raise street cleaner employment
garbage shit is played but you executed this nicely
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards
nice, best bar of the battle

Overall, Nib, I felt like you worry too much about flow and too little about punches. Not to say flow isn't important, but a verse with good concepts and punchlines will shit on a verse with only good flow anyday. Work on writing the punchline first then making a flowing bar as your bars all came across as kinda statements and that can be fixed quite easily. Demon, you came better last week and were pretty inconsistent here, but your opener and closer was really nice and the rest was good enough to pretty easily get this.

Vote - Demon

[Thor]

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
ROFL
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
good
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards
your second best bar

vs

Nothing

V/Demon

[Violent.]

I don't spit with fresh breath, but my death threats will turn you to mince
Since D's a pounce, I stamped his face and left it covered with Prince
Nah
Hint Pyro wins? Get ripped to bits- guys, don't try jumpin' the shark
This powerless coward's fightin' fire with jumper-lead sparks
Lol WTF
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'
Um, Ok
You can see men hire colonics off Dame Demon Pyrokronix
Claims he's had a gutful of me... my semen lines his stomach
Nah, Semen = played
Demon's too drunk off his 'drops' that 'plonk' to flow when he's sober
Here's me at the bottom of the hill- with D going over
Ight
Hoover and Paris Hilton must sponsour him to suck 'n' blow
Not since Bad Santa have I heard such a motherfuckin' ho
Lol, Needs rewording, coulda been nice
An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.
Lol, Ok


Vs

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
ITs Ok
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
Lol Nice
Yeah you're reppin IJL, shit ain't gonna trouble me see
Coz I ain't seen such a wack roster since The Rock and Golberg left WE
Lol. nice
Fuck are you buryin me, kid you're just postin bull
Coz you're like the ONLY dude in this league who's NEVER had a quotable
Nah
IJL? Maybe you think they're dope, but I guess that's natural
But even Tom could see that Cruise more overated than he was in Collateral
Dopeness
You're a fuckin disgrace, now watch as I drown you in ointment
Coz you drop so much garbage you'll raise street cleaner employment
Okay
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards
Nice

v/ Demon

Just came more original and alot harsher.

[Philly®]

I don't spit with fresh breath, but my death threats will turn you to mince
Since D's a pounce, I stamped his face and left it covered with Prince
no punch
Hint Pyro wins? Get ripped to bits- guys, don't try jumpin' the shark
This powerless coward's fightin' fire with jumper-lead sparks
word'd wrong
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'
lol, no punch tho
You can see men hire colonics off Dame Demon Pyrokronix
Claims he's had a gutful of me... my semen lines his stomach
kinda played
Demon's too drunk off his 'drops' that 'plonk' to flow when he's sober
Here's me at the bottom of the hill- with D going over
no punch
Hoover and Paris Hilton must sponsour him to suck 'n' blow
Not since Bad Santa have I heard such a motherfuckin' ho
ok
An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.
creative

vs.

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
nice
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
ok
Yeah you're reppin IJL, shit ain't gonna trouble me see
Coz I ain't seen such a wack roster since The Rock and Golberg left WE
meh
Fuck are you buryin me, kid you're just postin bull
Coz you're like the ONLY dude in this league who's NEVER had a quotable
meh
IJL? Maybe you think they're dope, but I guess that's natural
But even Tom could see that Cruise more overated than he was in Collateral
origanal, creative
You're a fuckin disgrace, now watch as I drown you in ointment
Coz you drop so much garbage you'll raise street cleaner employment
i kno u kno this is played, still good tho
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards
lmao,...good!

This was a very one sided battle, it was nibs flow verse's demons punches, wordplay and everything else.......demon had some nice lines,......think he jus dropp'd to win

Vote/Demon

[Lyrical God]

I don't spit with fresh breath, but my death threats will turn you to mince
Since D's a pounce, I stamped his face and left it covered with Prince
No...
Hint Pyro wins? Get ripped to bits- guys, don't try jumpin' the shark
This powerless coward's fightin' fire with jumper-lead sparks
No...
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'
Lol ok...
You can see men hire colonics off Dame Demon Pyrokronix
Claims he's had a gutful of me... my semen lines his stomach
Played but ok i guess...
Demon's too drunk off his 'drops' that 'plonk' to flow when he's sober
Here's me at the bottom of the hill- with D going over
Na...
Hoover and Paris Hilton must sponsour him to suck 'n' blow
Not since Bad Santa have I heard such a motherfuckin' ho
Nope not feelin it...
An anagram of his name reveals what he's wantin' for kicks
The twisted prick spends weekends huntin' for MONKEY-PORN-OR-DIX.
Lmao that you came up with this, but omg at how long it musta took you to find summat that warranted a decent punch that went exactly with his name. Props tho your best line...

Vs.

I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
Lol ok...
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female
Lol nice...
Yeah you're reppin IJL, shit ain't gonna trouble me see
Coz I ain't seen such a wack roster since The Rock and Golberg left WE
lol decent...
Fuck are you buryin me, kid you're just postin bull
Coz you're like the ONLY dude in this league who's NEVER had a quotable
Haha dunno if its true,and cant be bothered to research it, but good punch if its true..
IJL? Maybe you think they're dope, but I guess that's natural
But even Tom could see that Cruise more overated than he was in Collateral
Dope.. best line of the battle
You're a fuckin disgrace, now watch as I drown you in ointment
Coz you drop so much garbage you'll raise street cleaner employment
Lol basic but funny
So here's one final fuck you kid, I've no time for bastards
But it's obvious where Nib's work goes - just read his name backwards
Lol decent punch and went well with your last punch also...

Quite an easy win for Demon, he had harder hitting and more funny and creative punches. Although Nib had the anagram line, i still think that demon had the best wordplay. Nibs flow was decenty, but in the end just didnt match Demon

Vote/Demon

[Demon Pyrokronix]

Thanks for voting, I think I've won this...

[Trahedy Siphon]

Nib:
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'

Demon:
I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female

Overall:
Nib, you had glimpses of graetness but you didn't take advantage of it.
Take all the gloss off your punches and just give it that hard harsh
punch and your verses will be a lot better percieved. Demon your
first 2 bars had me going and I thought your verse was just gonna
get better but it didn't. Cheesy punches came in like the WWE one.
But hey, you did enough to win and that was probably your plan.

Vote:Demon

Hit my battle up please.

[Demon Pyrokronix]

Nib:
Teachin this bitch new tricks of linguistics is no easy stunt
A chap who aint received a 'clap', but he's still one 'cheesy cunt'

Demon:
I slice jews, fight fools and I'm dope when I write too
^Proves that ANYONE can write wack ass multies JUST LIKE you
Kids a fag, and long since his sex life derailed
But if we removed the middle man Nib'd finally fuck a female

Overall:
Nib, you had glimpses of graetness but you didn't take advantage of it.
Take all the gloss off your punches and just give it that hard harsh
punch and your verses will be a lot better percieved. Demon your
first 2 bars had me going and I thought your verse was just gonna
get better but it didn't. Cheesy punches came in like the WWE one.
But hey, you did enough to win and that was probably your plan.

Vote:Demon

Hit my battle up please.

My bin line was dope and you know it.

[Trahedy Siphon]

Lol, just a weak namplay. Good verse though either way.