Time Is Money?

[NuM-WuN]

this piece was pretty dope..didn't like how you repeated if time is money..every other line but i guess it worked in order to set up the multiple situations you presented..i like OM's that speak the truth and reality..your imagery was presented in great detail, and your vocab wasn't too simple, but enough that you could understand what you were sayin..your message was clear..overall it was dope for a keystyle..keep writin..oNE

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250776
^^please leave feed in this..

[Born To Kill]

cuz i like making it into the om hof every month. it's something i strive for.. i try to write at least one dope piece for that reason.

Ah...

Well, then...

Bump...

Why?

Cuz I liked this shit, that's why.

[Lay Doubt.]

thanks born, appreciate it man. upping one last time for the end of the month.

[Eye`]

if time is money, why's my mom stay prayin still?
why's she worked all her life but can't afford to pay the bills?
it ain't somethin i'd say is real cuz i don't believe it helps
if time is money, why do poor old folk buy dog food to feed themselves?
and no i don't agree with what jesus tells, i don't look forward to mass
why people go to church all they lives when it takes more of their cash?
i see whores when they pass, the reason that i'm asking this
if time is money, why can't all the times they sold their bodies buy happiness?
money's not exactly lasting bliss or i'd be rich for every time i bothered to cry
if time's money, why can't i buy some of it with my grandfather who died?
before i was around to talk to the guy, cuz now he is a ghost
if time's money, why can't i put it in a trust fund for when i need it the most?

Most important lines ^^.

Lay this was pretty nice, not as good as your Hero For A Day piece but it was better than most. There wasn't much imagery here, but i think all the readers got a good feel for what you were trying to send out here, i understood ur message. Keep in mind, you need to add emotion, imagery, and an un-predictable approach to topics, not the approach that everyone usually comes to see when having a topic like this.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253181
Hit it ^.

[Lay Doubt.]

i didn't think my approach is something everybody would take to this topic at all actually. maybe i'm wrong.. but i thought it was a pretty unique verse. i faced jacent in wop 3 with it and his may have been predictable.. w/e lol, i'll shut up. can't please everybody. thanks for the feed y'all. pzez.