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    World As We Know It.

    World As We Know It...

    Russia:
    Mother Russia..a desolate beauty..the snow is so cold it's scalding..
    ..but from me to you..it's gone to hell since the death of Stalin.
    Then there was excitement..training for war..cradeling a death-dealer..
    ..now men only scrape by as potato peelers or bread stealers.
    Shit could change..with a new president, it would be better I think,
    ..the countryside is so boring..so I turn to my friend, the hard drink.
    What else is there to do..hockey? Comrad, you don't wanna see me on skates..
    ..cuz I know i'll end up crashing..and arriving at hell's gates.
    I've led life the best I could..only stealing when I needed to..
    ..doing some oddjobs for the mob..comrad, it's sad but it's true.
    I'm a simple man with a family..I couldn't let them down as you can tell..
    ..It's Mother Russia that let them down..Russia the sub-zero hell.

    Iraq:
    Frantic just crazy due to war children are left poor,
    sinew of bones and residue of blood and gore,
    quenches the thirst of puddles in the streets.
    Bomb shells lay beside me when I can barely sleep
    Orphans scatter threw the valley ways escaping
    the sound of war , adults perish it's a everyday thing.
    Used to death and decay as US militaries show
    us little pity. Normal activity is burying my family.
    Grenades , Rockets , Bullets seen them all in action
    blown babies heads off other bodies left in fraction.

    South Korea:
    Always wondering, will North Korea spring a surprise attack?
    Relations have been shaky, especially in the recent past
    Are they storing nuclear weapons? Or is it just a hoax
    No one is really sure, except the country to the North
    Who can we trust, with differing opinions close to home
    Should we feel compassion, Or jnust leave them alone
    We hope for things to soon settle, We're on the right track
    Cause opening ceremony in Athens, we walked hand in hand
    Governments feverishly attempting, to resolve differences
    If not for ourselves, for the well being of our kids

    United States:
    Land of the free, is what it appears to be..but is it justa belief?
    We released the demon seed of the U.S. army in Iraqi territory
    What reason? A deceivin president telling you what to believe in
    Prison scandals leakin, deep in the heart of Congress is treason
    Can't decide Bush or Kerry, tearing in my mind it's just scary
    They barely give a shit for U.S., ..so what's our future carry??
    Now they want taxes on gas, try to laugh, but Im spittin facts
    What kinda shit is that? just more excuses for THEIR cash
    The government hold the keys, makes me want to just leave
    ....In this true land of the free and home of the brave indeed.

    Something really quick, feed please.

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    I like this, a rap about the world's state and some of the major countries in political diffifulties. There are a lot of political rappers emerging, and this piece serves to show that they may have a deserving place in the game. The vocab is nice, and the messages are certainly strong, as is your seeming knowledge of the political conditions of these 4 places. With knowledge and a willing writer, you can go a long way, that's for certain.
    In some places, I feel you could have done things a little better (the skating line comes to mind), but all-in-all, this is good.
    Personally, I don't like to read this structure, I like to read right-aligned text, but that's by-the-by it doesn't affect what is a good, solid, political rap that shows a mans true capacities.







    Can I ask for feed on my piece, Let's Clear The Air?

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    United States:
    Land of the free, is what it appears to be..but is it justa belief?
    We released the demon seed of the U.S. army in Iraqi territory
    What reason? A deceivin president telling you what to believe in
    Prison scandals leakin, deep in the heart of Congress is treason
    Can't decide Bush or Kerry, tearing in my mind it's just scary
    They barely give a shit for U.S., ..so what's our future carry??
    Now they want taxes on gas, try to laugh, but Im spittin facts
    What kinda shit is that? just more excuses for THEIR cash
    The government hold the keys, makes me want to just leave
    ....In this true land of the free and home of the brave indeed.


    this whole verse is nothing but the way I see this whole war thing.
    you really picked the point and layed it out well. you did a great jjob
    with the others but this took it.
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