Klepto (1-0) vs WTF MAN (1-0)

[Aines]

LLL Jr. Week 2

Word

first week went kinda well no shows are gone and cats who showed and who signed up are now in...

same as last week check by wednesday drop by friday come good....if your opponent fails to check but shows then that will be allowed but they will be deducted 2 votes for failure to check.....
so all in all you MUST drop a verse this week.....

last of all voting.....im scrapping the 4 links this week, unless voting activity goes then this is how it will stay and if i catch anyone feeding off the first vote you will have votes deducted...constant offence then i'll boot your ass from the league.....


good luck all

[.:KLePTo:.]

check....12 lines good?

[Marvelous_]

uhh sure..

[.:KLePTo:.]

I would tell you good luck and come hard with your flows,
but you'd just stick a rabbit foot n ya pocket & spray starch n ya clothes
3-0 in ABL 1-0 in here, bet ur thankin god for no shows,
I would say your good but I dont want my nose to grow.
I peep'd your audio and damn do you suck,
but your name is on point......................
.......cuz shit had me sayin What The Fuck.
Its like nuts bouncing on your tonsils the way ur voice be cracking,
but its funny cuz nuts is what your high pitch voice is lacking.
zzzz damn listening to ur audio makes me wanna nap-sir,
only hot audio saved on your com you downloaded from napster.
At first your chances of a win were 50/50 like a coin toss,
But I wasnt a no show so enjoy your first loss.


i just edited the 4th line forgot "my"

[Marvelous_]

^^
i heard u battlin' life, so you be battlin' the worse
he edit 1 word in his 4th line, shoulda edit the whole verse
hmmm.. lets look at this wack kid, surely looks lame
cuz ima put an end to you, like the last period in ur name
n i aint need to come hard, you already got urself dissed
just look at his custom.. .:KLePTo:. .. So. Shit.
if i attack, you better run.. cuz i wouldnt stop my friend
try too hard to hold ur ground, ull get arrested for loitering
and if you try too much, u'll get burned alrite?
cuz all of your moves Miss'es.. even when it comes to ur Wife
theres rumour you'll play in the nba.. quite of a comment
but all of his attempts been thrown down so much..
.. they'll make you a Southern Conference

pzzzzzzzz.....

[Marvelous_]

vote up.

[Skrollz]

v/ klepto

3-0 in ABL 1-0 in here, bet ur thankin god for no shows,
I would say your good but I dont want my nose to grow.
I peep'd your audio and damn do you suck,
but your name is on point......................
.......cuz shit had me sayin What The Fuck.

vs

nothing

[Marvelous_]

damn. i just re-read my verse lol.. yah it was weak.. damn...

oh well vote up still.

[Thor]

3-0 in ABL 1-0 in here, bet ur thankin god for no shows,
I would say your good but I dont want my nose to grow.
^barely quoted this, worded terribly

vs

Nothing

V/Klepto

[.:KLePTo:.]

lol Im working on that wording thing Thor ill get there.....2-0 me.

keep em coming

[M.O.U.S.E.]

3-0 in ABL 1-0 in here, bet ur thankin god for no shows,
I would say your good but I dont want my nose to grow.
(wording sucked foreal^^^)
I peep'd your audio and damn do you suck,
but your name is on point......................
.......cuz shit had me sayin What The Fuck.

vs.

n i aint need to come hard, you already got urself dissed
just look at his custom.. .:KLePTo:. .. So. Shit.
^^^^didnt flow righ....

v/ Klepto........I jus felt u came to basic WTF......foreal i mean the first four lines bored me..... last four lines bored me....Klepto came out fire and eneded well......

[Alphabetized]

I would tell you good luck and come hard with your flows,
but you'd just stick a rabbit foot n ya pocket & spray starch n ya clothes
(coulda been worded better. Didnt quiet feel this)
3-0 in ABL 1-0 in here, bet ur thankin god for no shows,
I would say your good but I dont want my nose to grow.
(dint really like the second line)
I peep'd your audio and damn do you suck,
but your name is on point......................
.......cuz shit had me sayin What The Fuck.
(kinda a played concept on his name)
Its like nuts bouncing on your tonsils the way ur voice be cracking,
but its funny cuz nuts is what your high pitch voice is lacking.
(didnt feel this either...)
zzzz damn listening to ur audio makes me wanna nap-sir,
only hot audio saved on your com you downloaded from napster.
(didnt feel this)
At first your chances of a win were 50/50 like a coin toss,
But I wasnt a no show so enjoy your first loss.
(alright ending...)

You really came more elementary than ive seen before.
This was deffenetly not one of your best drops.
I've seen you do a lot better and with funnier concepts.
Overall... i'd give your verse a 4/10
Qoutables: None.

VS

i heard u battlin' life, so you be battlin' the worse
he edit 1 word in his 4th line, shoulda edit the whole verse
(alright, kinda liked this)
hmmm.. lets look at this wack kid, surely looks lame
cuz ima put an end to you, like the last period in ur name
(played concept)
n i aint need to come hard, you already got urself dissed
just look at his custom.. .:KLePTo:. .. So. Shit.
(really, this bar was LAME)
if i attack, you better run.. cuz i wouldnt stop my friend
try too hard to hold ur ground, ull get arrested for loitering
(my friend and loitering? naw, i liked this, but it dint ryhme right)
and if you try too much, u'll get burned alrite?
cuz all of your moves Miss'es.. even when it comes to ur Wife
(idk, this seems played)
theres rumour you'll play in the nba.. quite of a comment
but all of his attempts been thrown down so much..
.. they'll make you a Southern Conference
(didnt really like this)

Alright, again... same as klepto, ive seen you come better.
Like you both DE-Elevated for this one.
You had a few more played concepts, and i few more i enjoyed..

Quotables: None


Concepts and Creativity here are both lackluster.
No real punches came in and hit hard, no big personal or diss here.
WTF's verse had more played lines, which is the only big difference i see.
Yet, i like WTF's opener over all of kelptos line.
I like both of you guys, but you both gotta come harder than this.
WEAK BATTLE.

Vote - WTF Man

[Piff Jones]

I'm going to pick the best bar from each verse and compare.

Klepto:

Its like nuts bouncing on your tonsils the way ur voice be cracking,
but its funny cuz nuts is what your high pitch voice is lacking.

Well it's direct because it's making fun of his audio. You need a better concept and better wording though. Not absoultely terrible. Maybe a little below average punch.

WTF MAN:

theres rumour you'll play in the nba.. quite of a comment
but all of his attempts been thrown down so much..
.. they'll make you a Southern Conference

Ok the whole connecting down and south in punches is getting old. And in the NBA there's already southern teams...... Didn't make that much sence. It was basic nothing good.


V/ Klepto. Besides those two punches the rest of their verse's was garbage. Those weren't anything amazing either but Klepto had a better idea and was more direct. Close battle guys. You both should put more work into your verses.

[36VWI]

.:KlePTo:.
At first your chances of a win were 50/50 like a coin toss,
But I wasnt a no show so enjoy your first loss

~Vs~

WTF Man
heard u battlin' life, so you be battlin' the worse
he edit 1 word in his 4th line, shoulda edit the whole verse

.:KlePTo:. u went after those personal punches- nice to see- rhymes were a lil basic, first bar had a multi, but none followed- a couple bars were setup but had no real punch to them (pinnochio line)- the rest of ur verse was decent, and made sense

WTF Man first off, i do get the stop my friend/loiter'n rhyme- but atleast use another word to help it land- maybe u jus dropped to quick- cuz ur verse came off basic- u started off alrigh, but it got worse with each bar- played rhymes without any punch to make em work, dissed his 'wife'?, NBA asperations?, the period in his name?, u need harder punches.

Vote .:KlePTo:.

[Seck]

I peep'd your audio and damn do you suck,
but your name is on point......................
.......cuz shit had me sayin What The Fuck.

vs

i heard u battlin' life, so you be battlin' the worse
he edit 1 word in his 4th line, shoulda edit the whole verse

Vote goes to Klepto because most of WTF's verse didn't make sense