Time Is Money?

[Lay Doubt.]

just somethin i keyed up for write of passage III today.

Time Is Money?

i find it funny, cuz..
if time is money, why's my mom stay prayin still?
why's she worked all her life but can't afford to pay the bills?
it ain't somethin i'd say is real cuz i don't believe it helps
if time is money, why do poor old folk buy dog food to feed themselves?
and no i don't agree with what jesus tells, i don't look forward to mass
why people go to church all they lives when it takes more of their cash?
i see whores when they pass, the reason that i'm asking this
if time is money, why can't all the times they sold their bodies buy happiness?
money's not exactly lasting bliss or i'd be rich for every time i bothered to cry
if time's money, why can't i buy some of it with my grandfather who died?
before i was around to talk to the guy, cuz now he is a ghost
if time's money, why can't i put it in a trust fund for when i need it the most?
i think it's a gimmick created by politics and i ain't feeling it's fair
if time's money, why was paris hilton BORN a fucking millionaire?
this bullshit won't stop, it's somethin we need to take action in
if time's money, why's lebron set for life cuz nike named a shoe after him?
it's almost like we have to sin, just in order to introduce ya riches
cuz immoral shit like porn is what's really gonna produce it quickest
the noose is thickest, my life? i don't know what it's happenin for
if time is money, i'm broke as fuck.. guess i shouldnt have any more
i've reached insanity's core and there's no escapin this evil
cigarette companies make money with time when they take it from people
i'm hating this lethal cycle that never ends, it ain't somethin i feel
because if time is money, then how come only one of em heals?

[Lay Doubt.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...18#post3452318
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=248532

[Drunken Waffle]

Pretty good, especially for a key.

i've reached insanity's core and there's no escapin this evil
cigarette companies make money with time when they take it from people
i'm hating this lethal cycle that never ends, it ain't somethin i feel
because if time is money, then how come only one of em heals?

Those lines stood out. This was pretty nice and insightful, as well as deep. I've thought of this metaphor a lot too, and with this piece you nailed it. It flowed pretty well too, and a few inner rhymes helped the piece. Above average piece.

Check out my new OM 'Consciousness, It's Bothersome'.

[The Vortex]

a pretty decent drop...i think the reiteration got a bit boring though..starteing so many lines with if and I..wasnt the nicest way to deliver it..but still had lots of good content and nice rhymes
pretty neat writing
stay up

[EyeBite]

a pretty good drop homie...i think the reiteration got a bit boring though..starteing so many lines with if and I..wasnt the nicest way to deliver it..but still had lots of good content and nice rhymes...vocab was good and complex...pretty neat writing..i enjoyed this....keep it up...peace

[Galaxy]

you sent a good message across, good way to approach this topic. although the repetitive why questioning is sorta played, you worded it well and the piece ended up coming out really nice. you're transitions of flow from line to line were flawless and the structuring was nice. good piece overall yo

[Lay Doubt.]

STOP SLEEPING ON THIS PEOPLE.

[Ike Ill.]

Right right.

Good job lay, I liked it, you have a way with words that makes eerything unplayed. Your a revolutionist. S'coo. I liked the read, especially the whore line.. lol. Other than all this, I'd say your multis were decent, structure was well, and opening few lines hit it pretty well. I enjoyed the read... serious. I'd say make another but I know you write from the heart, and that'll either take some hardship or happiness.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=249590

^ Get it, lay.

[Born To Kill]

Stop whoring for attention, Lay...

All the dope writers in WoP already said it was...well...dope.

So why bring it here?

[Legacy01]

Hey, i liked reading that... was really good, and to me, that was a whole new topic, the title was very appropriate, this was a dope drop... and looks like others have already said it was too, flow was nice, and i thought the structure and points made in this were perfect, nice drop as usual

[Lay Doubt.]

Stop whoring for attention, Lay...

All the dope writers in WoP already said it was...well...dope.

So why bring it here?

cuz i like making it into the om hof every month. it's something i strive for.. i try to write at least one dope piece for that reason.

[Mackin']

very nice drop. i liked how the second lines of every bar ended as a question, it made it a more interesting piece, if u ask me. dope structure and flow. i like how you went against your own topic. Like how you question the topic, how you go "if time is money ...?" i liked that. nice job.

if you get a chance drop feed on this (my latest om)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250224

[killaeffect]

"i've reached insanity's core and there's no escapin this evil
cigarette companies make money with time when they take it from people"

That shit right there was nice.. good flow.. nice point being brought acroos.. you got some skills no doubt bout that.. stay up.. 1Luv

[Lay Doubt.]

up.

[consperiacycrime]

good flow nice structure, reminded me a little of Why by jadakiss with that flow