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  1. November 4th, 2005, 11:53 PM #1
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    Black Beauty

    This a rhyme here that I wrote to all the beautiful black women

    Black ladies, this is for you

    Black beauty, you cross paths with my eyes
    Black beauty, you make my heart exercise,
    Black beauty I never seen skin and a body so perfect
    Black beauty, I love you and thats my verdict

    The face depicts the love that I witness
    When I see you, I include you in my wishes
    That smile and ass never been so fine to an extent
    Not enough money exists on you to be spent
    All I can pay you is love, respect, loyalty and care
    Girl, for you I will always be there

    Black beauty, you cross paths with my eyes
    Black beauty, you make my heart exercise,
    Black beauty I never seen skin and a body so perfect
    Black beauty, I love you and thats my verdict

    Innocence in ya eyes makes me reminisce on happiness
    When I see you, I realize how much I really need this
    No love can be measured since my love is infinite
    Cause it only take a minute for me to admit it
    That back, thighs, breast only what attracts me
    Who you are is most important if you ask me
    As you pass me, I get a tingly feeling I cant describe
    The vibe vibrates in my heart that then eliminates
    My ignorance, hatred, and stressful issues dont matter
    Cause with all of my love combined that I gather
    Theres no fixture for me to do or for me to undo
    Black beauty, I love you

    Black beauty, you cross paths with my eyes
    Black beauty, you make my heart exercise,
    Black beauty I never seen skin and a body so perfect
    Black beauty, I love you and thats my verdict

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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  2. November 5th, 2005, 12:01 AM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...57#post3405757

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  3. November 5th, 2005, 10:27 AM #3
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    This was opk but i didnt like the way you put that chorus in
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  4. November 5th, 2005, 01:59 PM #4
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    uppin, this was a song like thing, wasnt tryin to be the dopest here

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  5. November 5th, 2005, 02:09 PM #5
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    Song like?Hmmmmmmmm.I liked the chorus.It was simple yet attracting.The way you only talked about her.The verses were pretty good.The way you described her and the wording was good.The concept iv seen before though.Also the wordplay was ok too.Overall the piece was ok.But the concept and chrous was pretty good.
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  6. November 5th, 2005, 07:01 PM #6
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  7. November 5th, 2005, 07:25 PM #7
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    further towards an audio peice.. but it was still very nice... the hook was decent.. i really liked the vocab choice.. you could feel the emotion was real here... nic work on this you really improving... i can see you getting better with each peice. keep it up man i really like this peice.
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  8. November 5th, 2005, 09:09 PM #8
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    Song like?Hmmmmmmmm.I liked the chorus.It was simple yet attracting.The way you only talked about her.The verses were pretty good.The way you described her and the wording was good.The concept iv seen before though.Also the wordplay was ok too.Overall the piece was ok.But the concept and chrous was pretty good.
    i agree....wording was good nicely done..good drop peace
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  9. November 5th, 2005, 11:57 PM #9
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  12. November 10th, 2005, 07:22 PM #12
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    uppin, come on please give me feedback before this is done with.

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  13. November 12th, 2005, 03:04 PM #13
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  14. November 12th, 2005, 04:01 PM #14
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    your verse was o.k it could have been better but i love the chorus in this open mic i would give you a 8 out of ten 10 being the best
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