Lay Doubt. vs. Pharoah. [topical]

[Lay Doubt.]

Topic
You are walking. You see a young girl (13-17) being raped by two older men. You yourself aren't a big person, and are intimidated by the looks of them. Do you help her, or go on as if nothing ever happened???

due friday @ midnight pacific. 20-40 lines.

[Ike Ill.]

*has a hint this has happened to lay, and he walked away, only to get raped later in the day*

[Young Philly]

^good try, but Pharoah was the one who made the topic up.
See Last Word forum...
oh wait...
you can't.
BWHAHAHAHHAAHAH.

[Ike Ill.]

Shut the fuck up, Last word is password protected and you know that. that wasn't the least bit funny.

And what do you mean "nice try"? I wasn't dissing the topic.

Your an idiot =D

[Pharoah.]

Shut the fuck up, Last word is password protected and you know that. that wasn't the least bit funny.

And what do you mean "nice try"? I wasn't dissing the topic.

Your an idiot =D

yeah. you were dssing lay

and this kid says i made up the topic... i did

[Ike Ill.]

dropping for the banned guy.

At the pub alone seated unfocused from Tequila,
Held a shaggy wallet picture of her... I miss you Sheila
Diluted with intoxicants impairing my brain
I hunch depressed swept the shot glasses out of my way
Although I knew of what became that made us broken in bond
These memories we shared together now were shattered and gone
Beside the glass reflected scene aside the window I sat
Scanned the city nights recallin' where we use to be at
On the corner... right there... on 23rd and Sycamore
That's where I gathered bravery confessin love metaphors
To my bed.. held together lovin, sex on the floor
I reflected back the visions of affection we poured
Enamored deeply... I stood to pay my drink and then left
Into the streets humming barely ventilating a breath
My broken english was drowned with leery slurs in my speech
My arms extended hoping balance would be seen in my reach
Thru the streets I descended huddled deep in my coat
Till a noise awoke me sober to what seemed to be known
Out about along the alley some steps ahead of me
I peeked the corner to find that I dropped my Hennessey
An adolescent teen screamin was grasped in the lips
By some middle age Hispanics yappin native tongue shit
In a struggle, she slipped to find them sittin on top
This girl was uncontainable to let her panties get dropped
I froze witness to thinkin this unfortunate event
Stood emotionally clutched to see honey get bent
To my own intimidation as i stared with no act
I had no use of offense to make these neguhz retract
Then I ran thru a thought of somethin tragic to seek
What if my girl was the one they tried to take in the street
To perform brute intentions, violate her morale
With reaction to that thought... I instantly went wild
In pursuit I charged... took one to the ground
Three swings aside his skull and he ceased to make sound
The other came attackin, and wielded a knife
Jumped upon to shank my heart jeopardizing my life
In a struggle I laid held tight to his wrist
While he clutched to push his effort with the knife in his fist
I glared at the sparkle... the blade to my face
Losin' strength to hold my life closing fast in its pace
Suddenly... somethin shattered and soon as I blinked
He fell on top of me aside with some alcoholic drink
Soaked upon me and him.. with fragments of glass
The adolescent teen struck him... and his conscious went past
But as I raised myself.. pain struck on my chest
I felt the crushing sensation of his knife on my breast
I froze gettin shivers... I was losing much blood
The girl yelled out for help.. my hands graspin on mud


I dug.. inside my pocket... the picture I took
Held my honey soaked in blood.. and took 1 last look
Then I croaked... at the adolescent... touched on her chin
Placed the photo on her hands....

...my life came to an end.

[Lay Doubt.]

Topic
You are walking. You see a young girl (13-17) being raped by two older men. You yourself aren't a big person, and are intimidated by the looks of them. Do you help her, or go on as if nothing ever happened???


jenny's 14 with an old soul, she's been denying the answer
which is that her beloved father is slowly dying from cancer
and as she set out to visit him for his last chapter of life
who knew disaster would strike? here's what happened that night..

..exactly one year earlier..

me? i'm either too nervous to bleed or hurt and deceived more
i daydream about death cuz i can't find a purpose to breathe for
i feel so hopeless i close my eyes and all i see is a trigger
chronic depression from being diseased, i'm in need of a liver
atop a mountainside, gun in my mouth, yea i'm about to die
it's almost over, suddenly i hear a distant shout and cry
i should end my life now but i, have to wait till later in time
for someone might be going through a hurt that's greater than mine
out of the car, it's then i realize that as hollow it seems
my existence might be worth something, so i follow the screams
was always told not to wallow in dreams, but tonight's greater
i turn the corner, it's now or never, my chance to be a lifesaver
as guys rape her the fright shakes her, i'm scared to lose
two huge men, i'm only 5'8 when i'm wearin shoes
far as i'm concerned my shit is done, but you won't see this nigga run
i ain't kiddin son, so i jump on the back of the biggest one
the other two throw me to the ground, i feel my face as it aches
still it gives this girl the opportunity she needs to make her escape
i'd give anything for her to live, i'd pass on if i must
and with that said, she vanishes instantly, gone in the dust
god if i just, could get away too, please hurry this shit
i don't know how much longer i can take this flurry of fists
they're furious, pissed, i cried and they slowed
taking off in their car, leaving me bleeding on the side of the road
i awake in a hospital room with a doctor clearly walking
looking in my eyes he inquires, "can you hear me talking?"
i told him i could, then i thought i saw the dude shiver
as he informed me, "a man here offered to give you a new liver..
..you see i wasn't gonna tell you, but i thought it better you knew..
..oh, and also, the man who donated it left a letter for you"

to my anonymous friend:

"i give you this as a gift, now you may just wonder
why i did, and it's because my days are numbered
be grateful from this moment, make sure your time is better
i hope you remember me, cuz you'll be in my mind forever"

and then, on the page engraved like a potter..
it read,
"p.s., you're a brave man. thanks for saving my daughter."

..

[Record]

*cries*. fuck u both. this is fucking heart breaking u mother fuckers. how come u bitches arent rich, wtf was that. u guys almost made me fuggin cry that its not funny. i woulda gave u both a fucking oscar for this but there worthless nowadays. i am not gonna vote now, no fucking way. both of them were too fucking dope n anybody who says no is a hater. n just as appreciation for the both of u for writing such good pieces, im nominating this for legends. why? cause this fucking deserves it. good job guys, respect. ill vote when i make up my mind. which is probably never but still ill give it a good 10 ms think. its all the time i have.

[Rezen]

v/legends.

[nolonger]

^far from it man.,



but this was nice... my vote goes to lay for having a doper
all round approach to this shit the first stanza led me into
his story, vocab was ight cuda bin upped abit, flow was nice
only thing lacking was the rhyme schemes cuda bin stepped up
with some dope ass multies but yeah nice verse lay...phar
didnt come that good to basic for me.....yup.

[Cels]

http://community.rapverse.com/showba...d.php?t=201209

Seriously Phroarah you suck

Lay wins