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Thread: Heart On My Sleeve

  1. October 12th, 2005, 11:30 PM #16
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    first off let me say that u could of did a lot better... i seen ur drops i kno wat ur capable of.. this was way to basic for u ... ur vocab was very shallow and ur mutlis well there was some but not wat uve displayed in the past... this was an average drop n i kno for u , u want ur drops to be above average shit everybody does... u were definitely too simplistic... this piece was also lackin emotion, dont take this the wrong way im jus being open to u... and based off ur past drops i kno ur way better than this... im not sayin it was garbage cuz it wasnt the flow was coo i jus think u could of stepped up and made it fire... thanks for the reply on my post, appreicate it ... but i wanna see the twisted unordinary warchild that ive seen before...
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  2. October 13th, 2005, 08:10 AM #17
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    Thanks i really appreciate all the feed, i wrote this about 3 months ago, when i write my main focus has always been the flow i just enjoy throwing multies into my work and yeah sometimes i do sacrafice my vocab for flow.
    Sometimes i can join the two together to make something hotter, sometimes i just go over the top with the flow but im always improving with the vocab so i'll keep on improving and the next piece i write is gonna be crazy shit lol.
    Thats what i enjoy writing the most.
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  3. October 13th, 2005, 08:50 AM #18
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    Definitly could of dug deeper, however there was still a lot emotion still in this piece. Structure was good and the multi's were good. I do think there were some things that could've been described better or more creatively, but that's all I got to say. Good write.
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  4. October 13th, 2005, 08:53 AM #19
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    Warchild how u bin homs? This piece was very deep, u came with some of your best vocab in this piece and i felt the power of the vocab to. This was a piece that kept me reading alot and i had to read it at least three times before dropping because u was so good! Keep writing your dope shit warchild u have a talent and your pieces prove that. Keep it up!
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  5. October 13th, 2005, 10:17 AM #20
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    ^Thanks for the feed, im logging off so im uppin this.
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  6. October 13th, 2005, 04:36 PM #21
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  7. October 13th, 2005, 08:50 PM #22
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    yo i like it man u had excellent word play keep it up aight man
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  8. October 14th, 2005, 08:55 AM #23
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    First Thing You One Of The Best I Have Met When It Comes To Word Selection Usage And Play. Also I See Your Very Graphic And Intent On Not Just Entertaining But Conveying Your Ideas I Think You Have That Rare Gift Twin And You Can Only Elivate.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  9. October 14th, 2005, 12:05 PM #24
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    Appreciate the feed uppin this again. Im gonna work on a couple of new verses tonight and tommorow so i should have another OM up by Sunday.
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  10. October 14th, 2005, 01:21 PM #25
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    The Peice Could Definitley Relate To A Spread Of People
    You Really Put Things Into Prespective From Your Eyes
    It Was Good Oh And I agree Maybe A Lil To Perfect
    But YOu Can't Say Nothin Bad About It
    Really Felt It
    Keep Em Comin
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  11. October 14th, 2005, 01:41 PM #26
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    Wish you woulda had more lines that had the same impact that that did. Don`t think you always need complex shit for emotion. That line was simple. But had so much emotion in it. Feel me? This was a nice drop. Don`t need to capitalize ur rhymes tho lol. Just work on lettin` the emotion come off natural. Keep doin` ur thing.

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  12. October 14th, 2005, 02:16 PM #27
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    i felt this alot man causde i feel what u going though nice concept, structure, everything was on the right tracc

    9.8/10
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