How parents are these days by vafinest

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HOW PARENTS ARE THESE DAYS

as life goes on,parents are seeing alot of things
there little kids growing up,startin to grow wings
cuz alot of kids were raised wrong,but I don't know why
I see them in the streets,sellin drugs and gettin high
what the fuck are parents problems,don't they know how to raise there kids
cuz half of them are in group homes,for doing stupid shit
how are they suspose to survive,when you gave your kid birth
cuz they're all joining gangs,and really getting hurt
I seen the shit before,kids doin dumb shit
and parents not found,thats an example of a dumb bitch
espeically these parents on drugs,they're so irresponsible
they don't deserve to have kids,cuz they always into trouble
I know these kids feel pain,when there parents ain't on there side
cuz they feel all alone,so they just go run and hide
and cry there eyes out,feeling pain and much depression
so most of them commit suicide,and miss there school sessions
so learn this from the start,if your gonna have a kid
be a responsible parent,and take care of him did


I had wrote this cuz I feel there are alot of irresponsible parents out there who don't know how to take care of there kids

be back with my 2 links

[master theisis]

umm...thought it was a good subject to spit about but the content needed to be elevated

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heres my links

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=239057
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=240231

[Lyric Striker]

i thought this was aiight, you used dumb a lot, but it dont matta, i liked the topic, it seemed a bit short for this topic but you made it pretty good, good flow and strucutre, good rhymes, good drop man, keep it up and return the feed on my drop, LAst 3 words, aiight thanks

also this overall was around a 9.6
i might nominate it
peace

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Thanks for the feedback I'll go check your stuff out

[Antonio Banderas]

This was a pretty good drop. It was somewhat basic, but it was a great description on what a parent has to go through to raise a kid correctly. Actually, this was kinda original because I haven't seen one of these types of drops in the past. Solid drop.

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thanks for the feedback

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uppin for feedback don't sleep on this

[The Vortex]

an ok piece in essence.. seemed to lack some multies and internal rhymes tho .. which would give it more impact.. flow as pretty tite..vocab could be a little more strong...or maybe more extensive as you seemed to repeat certain words too mant times......all in all had some good sentiments and got the message accross clearly
so a decent drop..

pz

[kid sick]

nice structure........could have been beta wit the wordplay but i kno it was jus a quick key prolly....jus had sumthin to say, i feel ya......can relate i see the shit all the time wit bad parents, then they wanna blame the kids for the shit......

but str8 peice keep droppin the real

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thanks for the feedback

[CrazyCarl]

The topic has relevance, and readers have their own opinion going into reading it, so it might get a reaction out of some people. I thought you could have switched up "kids" and "parents" with similar words. You had the line about the kids growing wings, you probably could have put in more lines like that where you are comparing them to something. You got your opinion across, along with the title, it seems that was your focus.
Return the feedback
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=239411

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thanks for the feedback.and I left feed on your link

[Mackin']

i liked the topic alot.. i felt your emotion towards the subject to.. i can see that you feel deeply about this subject, the way you were describing how alot of parents are irrisponsible these days.. everything flowed nicely.. good structure.. 8.5/10

[J-Hova]

the topic was great but you couldve elevated it a little more not that much multies and u couldve had better word play