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    Last 3 Words


    (VERSE 1)
    I never knew love was such a strong attachment
    but once she died there was a big detachment
    my heart was ripped out i was so confused
    her death was all over the sunday night news
    i could have helped her ,but i was just to late
    fuck that nigga who was charged for rape
    he killed my lover the most loving thing i had
    now i can't think straight i'm way too mad
    I was there whatching her stare into my eyes
    i car was speeding up toward her, in surprise
    i could have jumped and pushed her off the road
    she got hit, my head was ready to explode
    my anger began to rise, i was ready to kill
    her last 3 words were "i love you", she was still
    no sudden movement after that tradgety
    the devil made this happen, it had to be
    even though this tradgic incedent was sad to see
    i couldnt bare to think, i was ready to cry
    i still had to get her death throught my mind
    my happiness was all i was tryin to find...
    but no....it was no where in my body
    especially when i have no more shotty


    (CHORUS X2)
    Her last 3 words stay in my head for ever
    i was depressed, we'd never again be together
    i was so still for a whole week, couldn't think straight
    my mind filled with love and revengive hate


    (VERSE 2)
    I gathered my strength to make it to her funeral
    i knew i ahd to be there, she was so beautiful
    i looked at the coffin i felt a tear in my eye
    before i knew it i was starting to slightly cry
    full of despretive actions i reached for the sky
    My head starting throbbin i was ready to die
    but i ended up in the uncomfortable hospital bed
    i was kind of surprised that i wasn't dead
    i just fainted from the sadness in my mind
    happiness is my body , i couldn't still find
    i needed it here with me to make me ease up
    my moto was i luv you just like Gs up.......
    still this very day her picture still plays
    i could just imagine her and all our past days
    together we'd walk and talk in the park
    i'd stay over her house till it was very dark
    she'd walk me home and we'd kiss for a while
    and she would wave at me and smile....
    i felt a strong feelin, a feelin of strong love
    she got kid napped that night by a thug
    next thing ya know the next day you see her
    ready to get hit, my mind was swirling..
    god....those 3 last words, i luv you...
    helps me a bit, to barely live through
    but i need to live, what i was made to do..


    (CHORUS X2)

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    thought the shit was deep good spit

    coulda been better but still deep

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    thanks for the feed, uppin for sum more

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    love it

    Yes sir im lovin it .... the shit is off the chains i love it

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    thanks for the feed man, i appreciate it big time, uppin for sum more

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    This piece right here was deep.You had a good topic and a good stroyline to go with it and that is a plus.Also you Imagry and emotion were good too cuz I could feel and picture the story in my head.Also you had a good structure and good wordplay too in your verse.I hope to see more from you soon homie cuz that shit was deep.And I know you left feedback on my new OM but can you check out my piece called "Inner demons" featuring my boy yuk its some pretty good shit you might like it

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    aiight, i'll check it out and i'll nominate ya peice, thnaks for the feed, uppin

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    yo that was tigh i could feel the vocab and everything homey keep it up i have nothing bad to say but good shit lookin forward to more of ur drop aight

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    thanks for the feed everyone, leave links and i'll retirn the feed, uppin for sum more feed....

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    Awesome song. You have got great talent. Keep dropping the shit.
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    thanks again for the feed from everyone, uppin again

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    aiight last up, i need sum feed, peeps

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