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Thread: Ear To The Ground

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    Ear To The Ground

    I sense the impending danger, it's a distinct vibration.
    And hence I not only hear, but listen with full concentration.
    They say:
    Time is money, and a picture's worth a thousands words;
    Then why this time, I only picture myself being barely heard.
    Muffled low, I speak in whispers as a defensive tool.
    When cruelty strikes, precious time will be an expensive jewel.
    A fool would plan out a strategy when instincts are key...
    Opening up the flood gates, saturating the mind to a degree.
    A lesson learned when slow to react, and it's a known fact;
    My ear to the ground, letting seconds subtract is more than math.
    It's life or death, and I'm just counting my blessings like the rest.
    Any move I make has consequences, that I don't want adressed.
    In a place of exchange, I have the feeling that I am possessed.
    Not by a being, but of a new holder, and it's causing me stress.
    All I see is tiled floor, as the bank robber has his boot on my neck.

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    damn this is the nicest OM i have heard in a while 9/10 i wasnt feeling the topic
    and i dont think u put it into ur verse well . but the flo and the vocab was amazing .
    you could use some work on ur structure . u had nice wordplay and good creativity . jus work on strucutre and displaying ur topic better in ur verse
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    thanks man, up

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    pretty nice man, feeling your vocabulary.....and the storyline was good, but i did feel you could have gone further with it, you know....get more indepth.....But hey, it was still nice. Maybe a collab sometime?...

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    thanks, I'll return the feed

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    I'm Liking the Imagination, and your approach was very different, but the concept was very played out. It wasn't much creativity here, but your flow is kinda choppy, you need to add multi's and stop rhyming "Only" at the "end" of your lines. It kinda created a "boring" vipe while I was reading your verse, no hate just my opinion. Wordplays was def good in this piece, the Emotion was good following it up with imaginary. Keep writing..Peace.

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    well i liked it
    nice wordplay and creativity
    i liked tha subject money is worth time
    dat shit was real 8/10
    good shit elevating
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    my audio shit

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    bump

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    up.

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    all link have been returned

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    aghh you left it in suspense ..like its gonna need a verse 2 to boot... was written with good flow and rhymes .. and the lines came thru clear and precise
    good vocab and word arrangement
    nice but too short and unconcluded as a whole song..


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    not sure is the bank robber was real or a metaphor, if that was a twist you wanted to drop at the end... had some appropriate vocab for a peice like this, not too complex not too simple... hit on a couple subjects we all can relate too so that was good... but it left me wanting a little more I guess... good drop though.

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    this was a nice drop from you homie.You had a good topic and a good storyline to the piece.Also you had good Imagry and emotion in your verse too.This is like one of the best OMs I read in a while.Also you had a good structure and good wordplay too.I hope to see more from you soon cuz this was some good shit too read.Keep up the good work and let me know when you drop some new shit so I can check it out.

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