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  1. October 2nd, 2005, 02:01 PM #1
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    Life through the Vortex

    Life through the Vortex

    Jump aboard this journey into the parallel-universe
    Ascend dimensions where everything is completely reversed
    A new earth observed through the eyes of an eagle
    Hail the rise of all ethical people… No political evils prevail
    Faraway from Hell where all miracles fail to astonish
    Drinking holy-water as tonic, fresh fruits from the tree-of-life
    Food is free-of-price nobody dies of hunger & thirst
    Children play freely: no more perverts causing danger & hurt
    Through the Vortex
    Time ticks anti-clockwise
    Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
    Through the Vortex
    Perfect prospects flourish
    Liberate; let your mindset nourish
    *
    Feast on the knowledge, a Polaroid image of peace
    Streets are hallowed; the jungle has plentiful foliage for beasts
    The Sun is frozen, the Moon glows heat for summer
    Were on foot over water… distorting gravity on this journey
    An eternity solely of bliss love persists as a sentiment
    Each continent is ever fragrant: breezy aromas of rose petals
    As dust settles exposes precious metal free of charge
    Thus bon-voyage peep the mirror image look see the mirage
    *
    Through the Vortex
    Time ticks anti-clockwise
    Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
    Through the Vortex
    Perfect prospects flourish
    Liberate; let your mindset nourish
    *
    See you in the idyllic parish, able to manage great acts
    Its people power so we never make a single village pay tax
    Follow my tracks, multihued tones embellish the skyline
    Sublime backdrop… unlocking thought to fresh perception
    I see my own reflection: he has no troubles or stresses
    I send a message: wish I can change places’ live this dream
    As iris’s gleam at the vista of this extreme flawlessness
    The angels align for this quest, plus every prayer is blessed
    Through the Vortex
    Time ticks anti-clockwise
    Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
    Through the Vortex
    Perfect prospects flourish
    Liberate; let your mindset nourish
    *






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  2. October 2nd, 2005, 02:03 PM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236625

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  3. October 2nd, 2005, 02:53 PM #3
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    Jump aboard this journey into the parallel-universe
    Ascend dimensions where everything is completely reversed

    -was feelin this line to....great word usage-



    "No political evils prevail
    Faraway from Hell where all miracles fail to astonish
    Drinking holy-water as tonic"

    -that right there is ill-matic baby...nice set of bars-

    "Feast on the knowledge, a Polaroid image of peace
    Streets are hallowed; the jungle has plentiful foliage for beasts"

    -that line amazes me everytime i read it-


    man this flow was dope...overall i liked the whole thing great word usage...only thing is your flow seems to just jump off from a rhyme scheme to another, but still this piece was in my eyes ILLMATIC
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  4. October 2nd, 2005, 03:15 PM #4
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    safe bro

    there is a science to the rhyme scheme,it works within the internals at the centre of each 8 lines

    good looking brah

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  5. October 2nd, 2005, 03:20 PM #5
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235647

    hit it up


    great wording and flow was mad ill
    topic was nice too

    the ryhme scheme OMFG mad ill

    nice drop

    9/10

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    Originally Posted by Vamp.
    this is perhaps the gayest thread...ALIVE....
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  6. October 3rd, 2005, 07:55 AM #6
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    thanks alot

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  7. October 3rd, 2005, 08:43 AM #7
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    up up up up up up

    up sons
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  8. October 3rd, 2005, 09:22 AM #8
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    All And All This Was A Dime
    Very Reminisent Of Illogic To Me And Thats A Good Thing.
    You Tackle Music Nit At Making It But At An Artistry Making The Reader Either Participate Or Loose The Full Umph Of Your Words.

    Easily A Great Read
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  9. October 3rd, 2005, 10:22 AM #9
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    Quote Originally Posted by noncentz(word~p)
    All And All This Was A Dime
    Very Reminisent Of Illogic To Me And Thats A Good Thing.
    You Tackle Music Nit At Making It But At An Artistry Making The Reader Either Participate Or Loose The Full Umph Of Your Words.

    Easily A Great Read

    good looking out.. yeah for sure i look for participation, or see u later kinder thing for real


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  10. October 3rd, 2005, 11:50 AM #10
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  11. October 3rd, 2005, 11:56 AM #11
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    nice job on this one...i was really feeling it.
    sound like a place id want to go to...
    the only thing that botherd me is

    "Time ticks anti-clockwise"

    tha "anti-clockwise"
    i hate telling people that somthing didnt sound right.
    but i dont know...
    "counter-clockwise"
    still the same rhyme with it...
    but i mean its your piece, you put forth-worth effort into it.
    dont let my little comment ruin it.
    ya kno?
    fa sho keep it up tho...

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    preciate it.
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  12. October 3rd, 2005, 04:06 PM #12
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    Quote Originally Posted by DATBOIP
    nice job on this one...i was really feeling it.
    sound like a place id want to go to...
    the only thing that botherd me is

    "Time ticks anti-clockwise"

    tha "anti-clockwise"
    i hate telling people that somthing didnt sound right.
    but i dont know...
    "counter-clockwise"
    still the same rhyme with it...
    but i mean its your piece, you put forth-worth effort into it.
    dont let my little comment ruin it.
    ya kno?
    fa sho keep it up tho...

    comment on mine if you would please
    in my sig (Elevate)

    preciate it.

    yeah for real bro thats a possibility

    i was just rhyming those words as multies tho u see

    ANTI-clockwise
    CLOUDY hot-ice


    anit somewhat rhyming with cloudy

    good looks out


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  13. October 5th, 2005, 10:22 AM #13
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    bump diddly dumps
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  14. October 6th, 2005, 07:10 AM #14
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    no more feed on this joint then

    oh well
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  15. October 6th, 2005, 07:16 AM #15
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    That was really pretty dope man. I especially liked the concept you worked with on here... never read anything like it before... quite unique. For the most part you used a wide varying vocab... although trailed off at times. More multi's woulda been good, but didnt really matter as it flowed excellently anyway. Nice work, keep it up.
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