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Thread: Contemplating Victims

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    Contemplating Victims

    piece me and homeboy did, any opinions appreciated...

    mainly a Devil/Angel on you shoulders type of piece

    Im the Devil, DATBOIP is the Angel


    Just copped a roller, so blunts comin one by one
    got the connect on speedial, its way past fun
    i dont mean as an addicition, its for recreational uses
    the bowls,bongs,and blunts,just tell us what kinda bud is this?
    see half the paycheck goes for the purple O, the other half on the dro
    just bring the sour apple wraps, and start rollin up bro!
    quick learner,so you know french inhales or shotguns
    and also quick to burn it, so your not to be outdone
    see you been smokin since age 13, steady havin polluted dreams
    we seen all types of narcotics, but its only green we fiend
    and really its not what it seems,we stay on that chong and cheech
    and if you holdin bud wit no seeds,just tell us the price you seek

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    control ya self, this is unlike you yo
    you burn a blunt of mids, and then you move onto dro
    dro get boring, so you move on to dank
    ive seen it before, you know it by tha stank
    youll get sick of it all, same ole' effect
    youll need pills when you hit 40 to keep your cock erect
    so put tha weed down, i know it might sound absurd
    but youll be thanking me once i pick you off the curb
    out of the slums where you use to be
    could never pass a drug test that involves your pee
    thats not the devil talkin, its the mary jane
    she'll tell you she loves you, then play tricks on ya brain

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    buddy fuck the future, it's all for the ride
    he's feedin you lies, smoke and leave that shit behind
    im your only friend, have i ever failed you?
    remember the times we had,when it was just me and you?
    like when we smoked in school, steady burnin up kush
    forget the health videos, so what if ya brains turn to mush?

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    im the one you should listen to,
    got to power of god, plus me and you.
    he aint yo real friend, man, hes just usin you!
    gotta be on my side, just me and you!
    when they find out, what will your parrents do?
    seeing how you spent all the money they gave to you?

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    i hate to break it to you, but you'll never leave the ganja alone
    cause i seen you do more cuttin than a stylin salon
    see, i even know you favorite blunts, the strawberry flavor
    and lucky for you, im pals' wit ya saviour
    thats my buddy angel, havent you met him?
    hurry and puff-puff-pass, we gotta go see our next victim

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    think twice, when you smoke, and turn your brain into a pebble,
    now you cant live your life right, cause you just sold it to the devil!
    me and him aint that much diffrent tho,
    he got dem red horns, and me i got dat white halo.
    but what you dont know, tha truth that lies inbetween,
    i work underground for the devil, so pass me that green!
    .Tell Oomp get the doomp clear the room its now official
    Droppin bombs like a North Korean Nuclear Missile.

    Eastside walk it o-o-out.

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    DATBOIP
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    Yep yep...
    Would preciate some comments...
    if ya aint got noffin positive to say, keep it to ya self...
    preciate it...

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    Nan u still gone vote on that battle between me and kp940 in frontlines?....


    neways i liked this peace i was feelin it both parts were good i liked Nan's better tho......do yall do topicals...if so i know yall good ..........and i liked the twist at the end overall good peice ...i'll be looking forward to work from both of you.....

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    uppin for some opinions...

    come on now ppl...

    thumbs up, thumbs down? sideways? what...
    .Tell Oomp get the doomp clear the room its now official
    Droppin bombs like a North Korean Nuclear Missile.

    Eastside walk it o-o-out.

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    uppin fo comments/oppinions/sugestions/whatnots. lol

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    yo yo
    hear this this has to be one of the best this week cause of ur flow man and the rhymes popped it off

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed. Thanks.

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    This was an okay drop it could have been alot better..if you intertwined the two together and made them flow...your wordplay and vocab was blah..it was really simple..and it could have been alot better.. Structure was okay i guess..but overall work on your vocab and wordplay usuage ..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Credz
    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed. Thanks.

    oh damn, its like that?

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    .Tell Oomp get the doomp clear the room its now official
    Droppin bombs like a North Korean Nuclear Missile.

    Eastside walk it o-o-out.

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    mcl, preciate it.
    i kinda ignored the rest of the feed back. lol

    keep the positive folks around... ya kno?

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    Those verses where gnarly bros.

    Keep up with the hatin!!!
    RAP IS DEAD

    :insane: :insane: :insane: :insane:

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    DATBOIP
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    Quote Originally Posted by CANNIBAL_CORPSE
    Those verses where gnarly bros.

    Keep up with the hatin!!!

    Preciate it homie...

    Also uppin fa more thoughts...

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    this has a nice flow, and stucture to it

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    I Just Wanna Battle Man,
    I'm New To This.

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