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    Silent Tears

    Silent Tears

    It's hard to understand the concepts of existence
    Were we created by God, Or are we all something different
    Minds thinking at diverse paces, Many are murderous
    Nothing is beyond the universe, The studies of Copernicus
    If that's so, Where could the sanctuary of the Lord be
    Astronauts are exploring, The pictures, they are recording
    And people's hopes get, High as the clouds we opened
    Then when fiction comes to play, People's hopes get roasted
    That's a feeling no one can cease, when you rest in peace
    Is your body truly just empty, and your soul just deceased
    Or is there another method to the concept called death
    The Reaper waiting for your time, then removing all breath
    Funerals, Are they sermons that make the path clearer
    Or are they just to break us down, looking through glass mirrors
    Final redemption for fast sinners, to kneel and ride with peers
    Or realization of death, a time to cry the Silent Tears.....

    (Little Interludish Shit, LoL)
    Hopes get high,(God Knows), We don't hope to die
    We choking, Why, (God Knows), We are broke inside
    Many times we cry, (God Knows), And hide in fears
    But many times, God can't see us crying Silent Tears
    It's what binds us to the choices we selfishly make
    And the orders the enforcing judges selfishly take
    God Knows that we can't make without crying
    But without trying, we stupidly ruling out dying....

    Why rape a woman, no matter if she's your lover
    You should love her, she may be an expecting mother
    Giving birth is enough pain, no need for emergencies
    That could lead to stillbirths, abortions or surgeries
    Why crack a face, just because they don't like you
    Don't give another reason not to, make people spite you
    Beef has rottened through heat, can we get along
    Maybe just spit a song, let the music forget out wrongs
    Why force a child to tears, what's with molestation
    We need to grow, less hating, let the world bless patience
    Why beat children to the point that they need hospitals
    Let the block sizzle, but the glock down and box little
    Why punish for executing the rights that we entitled
    People idoled, students get arrested for reading bibles
    That's what leads to assasination, and rappers facing
    Many years, trapped in cases, or slapped in pavements
    Why be an artist, if all our your products will be retarded
    Murdering and slaughtering, but then you claim you smartest
    The logic we embarking, sparking up the violent fears
    Is what forces more grave digging, and opens Silent Tears
    And creates change, rappers talk just to create change
    Speak on a whole album of garbage, just to create range
    Purposely murdered, figured out the game is more than spits
    Spawned children going through the Paradoxial Metamorphisis

    .....An Old Piece.....
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    Last edited by Yung Phresh; September 11th, 2005 at 09:41 PM
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    This was a nice piece man, it jst kept me hooked to it till i read to the end 4 sum reason. The rhymes were nice and ur multis were nicely placed. The flow was really nice and gd to read. Wrdplay culd b elevated but it was still gd. Overall i'd proberly give it 8.5/10.
    p.s nice title man, very attractive.
    nice drop, keep droppin

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    that was really nice, REALLY nice, the flow was too sick, the topic was pretty good, but i liked how u talked about a lil bit of everything, that lil chorus in tha middle (if thats what it was) was fire too, i think if u spit that on a beat, shit would be sick, really good vocab, jus everything was kinda perfect homie, great drop. yo peeps vote on my battles in my sig fairly plz!
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    good shit.. I was really feeling this one..

    flow was good, most part flawless..
    good concepts and ideas in the overall piece
    shows good intellect..
    and the message of Silent Tears was fit well into it

    all around reall nice drop.. keep up.
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    flow was almost perfect... got just a lil bumpy sometimes there
    good concepts and ideas in the overall piece
    shows good vocab and good message and concept

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    You touched on a lot of subjects, but it worked with the message. The title was good, and the chorus was solid. The piece was very smooth the read. In bringing in new ideas, I thought the wording was good, there was some subtlty in describing. The end rhymes were good, mostly larger words. Structure was good, and you got the message of the piece across.
    Thanks for hitting up my piece.

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    ..no prob..thnx for feed..
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