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[Jay-p]

young,but in a battle never run,quick to put the clip in, u wanna war bring ur gun,i fuck around with niggas that hold tons,send niggas to distrabute it on the corner and bring back money in large sums,i tote guns meaning that i keepem very close to me,for young niggas thinking they can move me,empty the oosies clip into his coogi,im known for my piff game and many hoes try to give me coochie,

[GayBasher]

yes that was absolutley horrible. somethin only a gay could think of, i suggest you stop rapping and just drink some drano, then you should be just fine.

[~ladie_streetz~]

this was very purposeless.... you need to elevate... and not jus post anyhting next time try to actually show some talent this was jus lame.. had no point.. elevate

[Sammy B]

Think of a better topic next time and try to keep your verses to a more rigid structure. I'm not gonna hate, but you do need alot of practice and definately need to rethink the way you write. Needs better vocab, rhymes were played try using some lesser used rhymes, and just try to be original in everything you do. Also the title of the piece does not catch peoples eye, because you see it so often, just work on expanding your current style to something more presentable. Read a couple other open mic's to get an idea, of what people come to expect for good om's.

[.Vendetta.]

Needs A Proper Title Man..Anyway Meh Lines Where Okay Not Great Flow Was Cool..You Should Make It Audio..Structure Was Terrible Disgrace Man Really..Wordplay Wasn't Even here That Make's Shit Whack Man On The Real Elevate On That..Vocabulary Well Really It Don't Matter Man Just Elevate And Shit..Also Come Up With Better Ideas Cause This Is Getting Tired This Kind Of Free Verses Liek For Reals

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Think of a better topic next time and try to keep your verses to a more rigid structure. I'm not gonna hate, but you do need alot of practice and definately need to rethink the way you write. Needs better vocab, rhymes were played try using some lesser used rhymes, and just try to be original in everything you do. Also the title of the piece does not catch peoples eye, because you see it so often, just work on expanding your current style to something more presentable. Read a couple other open mic's to get an idea, of what people come to expect for good om's.

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