Black & Blue

[Trema]

yo i bin gone fo a lil time, been hurting my gurl and shit...



i'm probably the first nigga to appreciate his girlfriends touch
-slowly smoking and inhailing the fumes from ma brothers dutch
switched on mtv base and she eyes up an r n b nigga (fucking bitch)
-as soon as her mouth open, my hand reach for the trigga
now why did i have to punch her for saying another male buff?
-i mite as well say to the police i'm guilty, pass me them cuffs
an now a nigger wondering why my gurl always got different colour arms
-coz when we argue fuss and fight i always be doing her harms
baby i dont mean it you cant c it, i bin played like a bitch
-if it wasn't for u sticking by my side,i would be in jail or laying in a ditch
all i wanna do is do rite by you,but my fist keep on talking to me
-when you punched me in my nose,my heart finally got fru to me
i listened to 21questions a thousand times and i prayed fo a gurl like you
-but when i finally got you, i took advantage and i fucking know i hurted you
i cant really care if niggas diss me for this shit, coz hip hop is 4real boo
-i just fucked up inside dat i showed you but hitting you black an blue

verse2 shit dont get sicka den me putting me gurl in a headlock
-for the shit i done i deserve to be blindfolded then shot
so much times you forgiven me kissed me and accepted ma apoligy
-but who the fuck was i to put yo friends and family fru that misery
who da fuck said i could meet you kidnapp you just to get sex
-sometimes i feel like picking up the mic and laying tracks to diss ma self
now i really feel like shit knowing i caused all that tension an pain
-now i understand why yo dad will never ever accept me as your mayne
i fucked up,!!!1


4real a nigga really fucked up, got this sexy asian gurl, know she mine for life! dumb arguments i got her parents involved-wrong move!now um never be accepted, an as for hurting ma gurl yeah i done that shit to, aint proud, but from this i got the pain now not hur, the pain knowing her family never gonna love me!

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[brady]

ok first of all if i read that right then you were hitting the girl...and if thats true your a fuckin dick...i had to watch my mum go through that..infact sometimes i still do..why would you hurt someone you love???

2nd of all that was a real nice spit lol, real deep and i really liked it you told the story pretty well....leave feed on my latest (my life part 1)

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=225902

thanks

~peace~ p.s try anger management courses or someshit

[Math0s]

im not even gonna read this cuz the topic is MAD offensive to what i thinks right or wrong.

[Trema]

i dnt condone any1 hitting a gurl but i made a mistake shit happens, but that kinda shit NEVA AGAIN

[madrap]

ayo that was a really nice shit an yea u did tell the story reall well.at least u had the guts to cum forth and admitt to it some people couldn`t even speak of it.

[Trema]

27 views and 4 replys ha ha,

[Trema]

upping

[conquistador]

ermmm this was okay....but I feel you were too far from relateable for me to really enjoy this...I wish you were more narrative and less imaginative

[Trema]

^^^Thanks yo, um try take ur advice and use it in my future pieces

[Trema]

uppin, all theese views and hardly any reply's

[Cody Nash]

ayo that was a really nice shit an yea u did tell the story reall well.at least u had the guts to cum forth and admitt to it some people couldn`t even speak of it.

^^^^Lmfao @ that...he's 0-5 and giving opinions on people with over 400 posts....Anyways...

The flow structure and Vocab was nice...But I didn't really like your topic...A lot of people do not respect that kind of shit and it bugs people to read...You had a lot of anger in the first half of the rap..then towards the middle things started to calm down...I sense things started going good with ya girl again? or is it over...lol...You did not have many multis...To be honest the structure was "ok" and vocab was fine...flowed with ease...other than the subject this peice was good...I'm not gonna say I liked it because that could make me sound as if I abused women aswell...NOT A GOOD TOPIC...and at the top...Welcome back Peace and love homie...pick better topics and attract readers attentions....Comment on my open mic if you will...peace

[Trema]

i know this piece the topic was not good but i just wanted to tell the truth and if peeps wanna judge me then i'll respect that.aint no abuse homie, we had a couple of fights and she got hurt, anyway shit good now and i got ma kid on the way, but um sorry if this offends anyone ok.

[Cody Nash]

Thats awsome...good thing too..everyone fights with they ladies...but in the end you either get over it or you lose the one you supposedly loved...A BABIE? damn you improved yourself...very proud of ya...thats a good thing...good peice...keep speakin the truth aiight dude? just watch the topics...Peace dogg

[mz.blaze]

As a female having gone through something like this, let me tell you that its not cool and i'm sure you know that, but seriously you cant treat nobody like that, nobody deserves it. With that bein said-i liked this piece, you fell off in a few spots, it coulda been worded better in a few places also. But i give you credit for real talk-you have the strength to admit you were wrong and wanna stop.

who da fuck said i could meet you kidnapp you just to get sex
-sometimes i feel like picking up the mic and laying tracks to diss ma self
^^ my favorite line, good emotion

[Trema]

thanks for the feed, uppin :drink: