Here For You

[XM]

Hook:2x
Memories how we ran wild the lord in my tutor
Saint you are Gods child, See you in the future
I was here for you, He was here for you
She was here for you, Still we're here for you

Verse:
Those who were built for action.....now lay in these open caskets
Flame to these chosen matches..we'll raise from these holy ashes
Attacks and Clashes its drastic......this savage behaving madness
Im slashing and leaving gashes....dispatching soldiers with passion
Its tragic to seem'em blasting...........crashes and souls callasping
Imagine there no relaxing..............just asking for normal passings
Extactic to see his passing...............im mad cuz my homie vanish
Harashing the rich and average........ive manage to keep relasping
Im lashing at instrumentals..........detaching myself from more shit
Its hard amounting to something when your always counting losses
Prolonged it.....looked back to all the things that i've been through
Gathered my mentals............and put them to these instrumentals
Homie I miss you.............................shed tears love you I do kid
You are not alone.............................Ima see you in a few years
You started showing me.........that life is more then what it seems
I know your watching over me..........and down forever holding me

Hook:2x
Memories how we ran wild the lord in my tutor
Saint you are Gods child, See you in the future
I was here for you...........He was here for you
She was here for you....Still we're here for you

Verse 2: Repeat
We gotta pray too..........I think the loard plus i think you
We've lossed a soldier.....but heaven has gained an angel
Now bow your heads...........witness the powers of prayer
Through crucial times....we'll realized the lord is our savior
As we walk with that shadow...............we carry crosses
Understand acts of revenge..............only result in losses
Keep saint in mind.............God has chosen his holy profit
Even thoh closed in his coffin we'll still role with him often

Hook:2x
Memories how we ran wild the lord in my tutor
Saint you are Gods child, See you in the future
I was here for you...........He was here for you
She was here for you....Still we're here for you

"This will be done on audio, with the instrumental made by me"

R.I.P - James Parnell aka Saint Louis

[XM]

Links:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=225203
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=225198
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224819

[XM]

uppin for feed c'mon ppl

[EyeBite]

*thinking*
well..this was sure different, the way you set it up looked different but still cool, this was creative and i like it, i liked the great rhymes and smooth flow throughout this whole drop, same with the strucutre, i enjoyed reading this, complexity was here, vocab was here too, great job overall, keep droppin, keep it up, peace

"hey can you check out my OM when you get a chance"

[XM]

Give me the link and i'll check it out and thanx fo the feed it is just a simple OM i did but its get'n views but no feed but ehh..........lol

[DownLow'nDirty]

now thats some Megamultimadness..

G/L..

[XM]

I kno but ehh..............people bring me some feed

[Tony B]

heh, you should lemme do the hook for the audio

but newayz, you got a unique rhyme scheme, i really like that cuz your not tryna be like everyone else. you obviosly have a good vocab to be able to use multies in that manner. pissed me off tho to see you use the word 'instrumentals' twice but it's coo though, imagery was good.....pretty good topic as well, the hook really stands out, the flow was good, im really feelin this piece if you couldnt tell, lol. i just wish it wasnt so short. Bet your glad some1 gave you some actual feed this time, lmao

keep droppin kid

[XM]

damn right thas wassup train uhmmmm....this took me like 20-30 mins and i was just tryna get a feel for topicals ya kno and OMs again but i was gonna make it longer oh and when i go audio you can do the hook i'll make the beats so ya kno thas wassup keep the feed come'n

[Keyser]

Sup mal, nice piece here, A good use of multies and a clever rhyme scheme, like your hook to, wanna fade that out when it comes to audio, hit me with that, one thing am not to keen on is "......" to make your structure fit or you was doing it to make the reader pause, as you know structure isnt everything, u have flow anyway and nobody cares aslong as your topic has flow, meaning and depth, which it did so a nice drop here mal on your use of multies and a good meaning embedded in your o.m, n keep it up cuz.

[XM]

Lyricist its not really a pause i just dont like my text all over the place ya kno i like things to fit plus it keeps the reader follow'n and not look'n all over the place for my next line and give'ems the idea of my flow ya feel me? but thanx for the feed

[Keyser]

^Word, but some people might think its a break in your line, thats all.

[brady]

dam that was really nice..i liked the layout and shit but it was really hot

[XM]

up'n for feed..........................................

[CRUCIAL TIMES ev]

Very Very Well Done. I Can Tell You Were Very Serious About This. All The Technical Stuff Was Great. I Was Feeling a flow...and the pauses 1 LYrcist was talking bout...meh it would sound good like that too. Multies and all was great. I honestly really liked the Hook. May Seem simple to sum but to me...i felt alot of emotion from that. I felt like you expressed the feelings you felt very well. Not much i can say to make it better cuz u did everything right. Only feed to help ya out with writing songs is maybe go into sum more description. What you missed bout ur brother and wat times you went through. But honestly...i think everything was fantastic. I'm sorry to hear bout ur bro. I'm Positive He was great. Holla at me when you do audio on this.