better days

[Richard Parker]

I need someone to test my patience..
and make me stronger...
I'm lasting longer out of desperation
took my time & spent it waiting
for tomorrow...
but tomorrow came & was a day of sorrow
happiness was borrowed.. faked when greeting strangers
paused my responsibility & ignored the beeping pager
but the noise wouldn't go away
& skys were growing gray, in my imagination
didn't bring this upon myself..
on my state of bliss a plagiarist formed an aberration
couldnt admit, it was really me and my kind of cancer
ignored the problem as i struggled to find an answer..
so it grew, i stood by spineless,
thinking of better days...not knowing how to find it

[Willy B]

short sweet and a om about a girl..depressing makes me think about my girl. nice vocab overall good nothing over the top dope but nice vocab suited the topic which is nice nice use of different words say the say thing good not dope but good....feebly getting dizzope on topical tip.....lol word

[Cels]

This was really dope feebs. Flowed pretty smooth and had great vocab. This was also worded very nice and the ending was ill.

Good read.

[~ladie_streetz~]

very sweet, but also sad in a way
you did a nice job with this keep up what you're doing i like your style
it was short, but great imaginary parts
its real in all ways nad i love it
you're welcome

[sILLable]

pretty ill...not the best thing ive read from you by far..but still pretty ill...this piece was short..but emotion filled...nice imagery and vocab...not to over tha top with it..right on point..keep droppin..and could you check out tha link in my sig titled Corrupt Authority..or Concrete Roses......id appreciate it.~1~