You know the rules...
10 lines
Due within 45 min of checkin....
Just drop when your done....
You know the rules...
10 lines
Due within 45 min of checkin....
Just drop when your done....
Ok this is my check in....
Not checkin in yet...Make it 20 lines...get back at me
Check it...
Yo this kid thinks he's got what it takes to soak up the fame...
Ya right you couldn't even do that if you had a name...
So wake up to reality son you know clearly that this battle is over...
Your game's so shitty...Help you win?...Not even a four leaf clover...
Watch yourself because the words I spit disperse into different directions...
Your words go no where...Just like your career they look in a mirror and see ones reflections...
Its important to keep your things in perspective...
You can't find your rhymes...So your stupid enough to call a detective...
My objective is to receive the punches that you so frequently throw...
Then throw them back faster than you could even let one go...
Check-in
Listen...
Ya spits mix-match and outta date...so of course u aint gonna beat me in that "type of fashion"...
See he tried to work at a daycare...but everybody knows he's "dangerous" around kids, like Michael Jackson/
Ya skills mythical the way my raps "killin ya soul"...so ya better take another dip cuz I never touched ya achilles heel...
And ya must be a "get-away driver", cuz his "wheels be like bananas"...see when it come to "guns", "rubber" is the only thing, he "really peels"/
Ima fall asleep after this verse...but Im nightmare to this bitch, so someone please show em where the night light is...
An look how this kid tried to use a personal...he said something about my name, but he gonna sleep like this (0_-)/
You betta lose yourself in ya music kid...cuz Ima get shady in my maze of disses...
and u cant "see me", so wit these punches...u gonna feel my hands like Ray did bitches/
Stop spittin, dont u pay attention to boos...I cant tell u made and F in physical science...the way u got the potential to lose/
You fed off my verse bro thats against the rules...But im not a fag so I won't report you....but you voters keep that in mind....
uppin this for votes....lets get this rollin people....
I reckon Aquiles won that one and not because of the rule breaking but the fact that (-_-) didn't hardly rhyme anything in that verse. He just hit the 'near rymes' and didn't bring them on strong enough at that.
Aquiles: 8
(-_-):5
Yo this kid thinks he's got what it takes to soak up the fame...
Ya right you couldn't even do that if you had a name...
I see what you were going for, but executed poorly
So wake up to reality son you know clearly that this battle is over...
Your game's so shitty...Help you win?...Not even a four leaf clover...
Again, executed poorly and played
Watch yourself because the words I spit disperse into different directions...
Your words go no where...Just like your career they look in a mirror and see ones reflections...
Also, very indirect and simple punch
Its important to keep your things in perspective...
You can't find your rhymes...So your stupid enough to call a detective...
this was actually not bad
My objective is to receive the punches that you so frequently throw...
Then throw them back faster than you could even let one go...
alright
vs.
Ya spits mix-match and outta date...so of course u aint gonna beat me in that "type of fashion"...
See he tried to work at a daycare...but everybody knows he's "dangerous" around kids, like Michael Jackson/
Michale Jackson shit is really played
Ya skills mythical the way my raps "killin ya soul"...so ya better take another dip cuz I never touched ya achilles heel...
And ya must be a "get-away driver", cuz his "wheels be like bananas"...see when it come to "guns", "rubber" is the only thing, he "really peels"/
This was hella stretched.. not hitting
Ima fall asleep after this verse...but Im nightmare to this bitch, so someone please show em where the night light is...
An look how this kid tried to use a personal...he said something about my name, but he gonna sleep like this (0_-)/
This is feeding...aka, don't do this
You betta lose yourself in ya music kid...cuz Ima get shady in my maze of disses...
and u cant "see me", so wit these punches...u gonna feel my hands like Ray did bitches/
nope, didn't hit him
Stop spittin, dont u pay attention to boos...I cant tell u made and F in physical science...the way u got the potential to lose/
This was your best yet but not worded well
Overall, Aquiles needs a lot of work on his execution and coming more fresh, but he had a few bars which weren't bad. The detective shit was the line of the battle here. (-_-) needs to drop the slashes from his verse and not stretch the bars so much. They were so long and disrupted the flow. Your punchlines weren't hitting either, either played or not effective so work on that.
Vote - Aquiles
Ya spits mix-match and outta date...so of course u aint gonna beat me in that "type of fashion"...
See he tried to work at a daycare...but everybody knows he's "dangerous" around kids, like Michael Jackson/
Ya skills mythical the way my raps "killin ya soul"...so ya better take another dip cuz I never touched ya achilles heel...
And ya must be a "get-away driver", cuz his "wheels be like bananas"...see when it come to "guns", "rubber" is the only thing, he "really peels"/
vs.
Yo this kid thinks he's got what it takes to soak up the fame...
Ya right you couldn't even do that if you had a name...
So wake up to reality son you know clearly that this battle is over...
Your game's so shitty...Help you win?...Not even a four leaf clover...
Watch yourself because the words I spit disperse into different directions...
Your words go no where...Just like your career they look in a mirror and see ones reflections...
both verse wasn't 2 good if u ask me. but i thought that Aquiles came much harder with some of his bars. (-_-) your shit sucked foreal. no good punches that i liked or thought was good 2 me. make harder punches next time, be more creative and uses better vocabs. also fix ur structure up alil cuz it was wack, not feelin it. Aquiles gets this for havin decent punches and comin harder.
Yo this kid thinks he's got what it takes to soak up the fame...
Ya right you couldn't even do that if you had a name...
^^not really working
So wake up to reality son you know clearly that this battle is over...
Your game's so shitty...Help you win?...Not even a four leaf clover...
^^okish
Watch yourself because the words I spit disperse into different directions...
Your words go no where...Just like your career they look in a mirror and see ones reflections...
^^stretched line, not effective punch
Its important to keep your things in perspective...
You can't find your rhymes...So your stupid enough to call a detective...
^^corny, but okish
My objective is to receive the punches that you so frequently throw...
Then throw them back faster than you could even let one go...
^^no diss
vs.
Ya spits mix-match and outta date...so of course u aint gonna beat me in that "type of fashion"...
See he tried to work at a daycare...but everybody knows he's "dangerous" around kids, like Michael Jackson/
^^nah, MJ shit is played
Ya skills mythical the way my raps "killin ya soul"...so ya better take another dip cuz I never touched ya achilles heel...
And ya must be a "get-away driver", cuz his "wheels be like bananas"...see when it come to "guns", "rubber" is the only thing, he "really peels"/
^^too stretched, punch is not really direct enough
Ima fall asleep after this verse...but Im nightmare to this bitch, so someone please show em where the night light is...
An look how this kid tried to use a personal...he said something about my name, but he gonna sleep like this (0_-)/
^^not a diss, saying he's gonna sleep
You betta lose yourself in ya music kid...cuz Ima get shady in my maze of disses...
and u cant "see me", so wit these punches...u gonna feel my hands like Ray did bitches/
^^ok
Stop spittin, dont u pay attention to boos...I cant tell u made and F in physical science...the way u got the potential to lose/
^^a bit better
hmmm "face"'s structure and flow was mashed up, but the two bars at the end were ok...also attempted multis.
Aquiles, just wasn't feeling many of your attempted punches, although your structure was better, but still
v/(-_-)
:.Rise.:
:.1.:
(-_-)
first of all wat up wit this guy^............. explain votes duh................
next i agree wit some of ya'll, some of the verse of mr. face here didn't rhyme......
regardless of rules........(weren't specific)
wit better punches and disses........
v/Aquiles
If u wanna win against me
then i'll diminish ya hope
cause if u was a sniper u couldn't see me
even through a new scope
come get me...
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