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    The Drama of Infinite Hearts



    The Drama of Infinite Hearts


    Simply behold that covering shell of flesh like the finest gold
    Olive esoteric eyes silently speak of many stories left untold
    Such a perfect mold with her luscious lips as forbidden fruits
    Yet the sadistic scars reveal the drama of her chosen routes
    Even beyond this rotten spot, she still seeks her stolen soul
    To make her whole as she was ferociously forced into a role
    She no longer plays, now locked up inside this gilded cage
    Before she turns that page, her heart needs to free its rage
    In the vague hour of gloom she rapidly raises from her tomb
    As she fiercely hunts down he who caused this dark doom
    Crying out to those buried infinite hearts to fight by her side
    Their forces collide in raw revenge of a soul that never died
    Uttering maligned moans when they crawl out their graves
    In search of the pharaoh who’s not as brave as he behaves
    Through time she turned callous, approaching royal palace
    Rageful eyes ready to kill, addicted to a murderous malice
    She enters the bedroom as he lays wrapped in silk sheets
    Ready to compete as her bruised heart starts to skip beats
    In a final strife: hands are trembling over that rusty old knife
    She’ll use to make him feel once and for all she is his wife
    Now gradually slicing his throat as his words float in the air
    Transcend in quotes, his sapphire eyes expressing despair
    Crimson drops coloring her dress as she cuts with finesse
    All the anger she suppressed, now she can release stress
    Leaving him breathless she walks out with a devilish smirk
    She is letting those ravenous mummies finish off the work
    Licking off her fingers so she tastes his warm darkred blood
    Ultimate revenge for times he dragged her through the mud
    Happiness fills her being, in her hand his most private parts
    As a nice example of fine arts: the drama of infinite hearts



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    pretty dope....imagery and emotion ran rampant...your vocab and wordplay were complex..as was your rhyme scheme...very nice drop..your strcutre was tight as welll..kinda poetic but never tha less ill.....keep droppin tha hottness...and be on tha look out soon for my new topical piece titled God has a Gun..~1~


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    That was hot,seemed more like poetry than rap, but still it was fire. Your flow was on point, and you used good vocab. You caught my attention and held it throughout your drop.

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    This was emotional i enjoyed reading it, More on a poetic level i think but overall a dope drop your imagery and flow was nice i saw a few multies not many though
    i'm gonna read it again now lol
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    This had more emotion than on anything i've seen u eever write DQ.. much props.. wasbt really topical.. more liek a poem haha.. but its cool.. you imagery was always there.. and vocab was eh.. but dont matter lol.. i really liked it.. hommie skillet ..

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    this wuz a nice piece
    vocab was nice... and it seemed very deep doe...
    lines stretched jus a lil bit, but the whole piece was great doe.. u did good

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    Thanks for the feedback everyone, I'll return the feed as soon as I get back from work!



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    Maybe a little more?



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    Good Shit.
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    ^Uhm...okay...

    Upping



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    Poetically worded with some complex subject matter and obscure images which kept me reading. I liked the topic, maybe you should've dumbed it down a bit but your vocab was strong and imagery intriging. Some multi's would've been good to see, but the piece flowed fine without them.

    Good work.

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    Nah...this didn't need to be dumbed down at all...it was nicely put across as it was.
    For some reason (I have no idea why) it was giving me similar images to a Macbeth scenario...lol like I said, I have no idea why...maybe just the way everything was worded.

    Now gradually slicing his throat as his words float in the air
    Transcend in quotes, his sapphire eyes expressing despair
    That was my favourite couple of bars. Overall it was a rather pleasant read.

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    Thank you both for the feed, I shall return the favor



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    ayo drama what up!!!!!!!!!!!its me shodown !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!this again was a nice drop!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!real i was really feelin this ur flow was good and emotion!!!!!!!!!!!!


    check my OM out called are ya feelin me!!!!!!!!!!!!


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    ^Thanks boy...



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