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Thread: Prison Songs

  1. #1
    .Reign.
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    Prison Songs

    Im living in fear, and living in pain,
    No reason to be here, No reason to have a name,
    Life has been lost, do to my wrongs,
    So now im here singing you these prison songs,

    Locked up in this cell, this world is empty,
    I never coped with the darkness growing that was in me,
    Days have gone by, time has passed away
    It’s safe to say, that it’s to late to pray,
    My minds decay, is just to damn great to sway,
    So most likely my sanity will need never stay,
    Trapped inside a box, with a metal lock,
    As I watch the clock, waiting for my heart to stop,
    It’s crude to feel like im being mistreated,
    And crime never paid, I was being misleaded,
    Didn’t blink at the sentence, when I first received it,
    Nothing changes my mood, and nothing can faze me,
    I guess im taking the first steps of becoming crazy,

    Im living in fear, and living in pain,
    No reason to be here, No reason to have a name,
    Life has been lost, do to my wrongs,
    So now im here singing you these prison songs,

    Life in this place, im here forever,
    Im losing myself, I can’t get it together,
    Its so cold and bitter, so I cant whether the weather,
    Constantly seeing things, these horrid images,
    Pupils shrinking, eyes gaining marks and blemishes,
    Loosing sleep every week, body starting reek,
    Forgetting everything, I think my brain sprung a leak,
    Not the simple life, this more complex,
    The new contest, is just, protecting my neck,
    With emotions gone, there’s no tricks up the sleeve,
    Because these tales from the cell, are all I need to breathe,

    Im living in fear, and living in pain,
    No reason to be here, No reason to have a name,
    Life has been lost, do to my wrongs,
    So now im here singing you these prison songs,


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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=220338&page=2
    Last edited by .Reign.; August 10th, 2005 at 08:38 AM

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    uppin

  3. #3
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    uppin for honest feed.

  4. #4
    Shotty~man
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    i liked this,it had feeling and i like your structure and flow.

    keep writting nigga.

    pz.

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    pretty nice yo.. works more as a poem for me, could maybe do with some more scenery to depict the images...nice drop tho tight rythym/flow.. some nice rhymes some a lil basic..

    all in all entertaining

    keeep at it yo

    rtf-

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    good shit yo i really liked diz. It had good vocab, da structure was real good which obviously helped out da flow cuz da flow was nice. U didn't really need em in diz but next time try throwin some multi's in there. Keep droppin. 1

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    thanks for feed. But the multis were there i think.

    Days have gone by, time has passed away
    It’s safe to say, that it’s to late to pray,
    My minds decay, is just to damn great to sway,
    So most likely my sanity will need never stay

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    multi would be more like-


    Days have gone by, time has passed away
    It’s safe to say, that it’s to overcast to pray,
    My mind fast decays, is just to damn great to blasted sway,
    So most likely my sanity will need never surpass its stay


    bit of a wack example by me but an example all the same

    pz
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  9. #9
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    ^ yeah overcast wouldve been great... but my vocab isnt like urs i gues..

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    upin

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    uppin

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    DAM THAT WAS GOOD SHIT, yo i really really liked that homie, that sounds like some shit 2pac would write, dam that was good, the flow structure rhymin, everything was good, keep dis shit up man u got skills.

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    .Reign.
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    ty uppin

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    up.

  15. #15
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    Quote Originally Posted by Vortex
    pretty nice yo.. works more as a poem for me, could maybe do with some more scenery to depict the images...nice drop tho tight rythym/flow.. some nice rhymes some a lil basic..

    all in all entertaining

    keeep at it yo
    ^^^I'm feelin what Vortex said...it did come across a little more poetic, it was a nice drop either way, flow in my opinion was on point, it could've used a little more creativity...I like the topic but again, its been done many times but that really doesn't take away from your drop...Nice piece.

    look out for my 3 part OM...comin soooner than you think

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