this was nice i thought it sounded more like peotry then rapping but nice...
the vocab was hot...i didnt see most of the multi's and the topic was oddly similer to a lot of my own work...
keep up the good work
this was nice i thought it sounded more like peotry then rapping but nice...
the vocab was hot...i didnt see most of the multi's and the topic was oddly similer to a lot of my own work...
keep up the good work
yo very good verse i liked this on a lot. u had real good rhyme scheme an wordplay on this. u should keep writen more pieces cuz if there good like this one was ill definately read them. but just like carl said i thought the second part of this was better than the first and it got better as i read.
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Man i liked it nce words ending dragged but it wuz good everything wuz used right
and linked together keep up the good work ill be looking for more of ya stuff peace
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That was pretty good, the structure was good, it all flowed pretty well, the vocabulary was ok, could of been better, the concept was ok, imagery was pretty good, overall you did a good job.
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This was good man, I think its simplicity was what made it stand out. I say simple because you write the way I do, but we make it work and express very well and I think its a sign of a good writer. The strongest part in this was your voice, this was very expressive and strong so I could imagine it being said and understood it, good work man.
imagery and rhyme scheme was a little too simple for me...had potential and it wasnt terrible...just not my favorite...keep droppin and elevatin.~1`
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=219372
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ur wack u crnt rap il give u sum slack u neek im hrd u week i live by da gun so il die bi da gun but udnt av a gat like me cuz ur a fukin pussy cat meaw ur mums a dog we fuk al nite wen i log on roof roof ic ulerkin ill b givin u merkin ur crusin 4 a brusin i dnt get jaked u do il samk u 4 ur fone put a bullet 2 chest it al go vest 2 da chest out da bk thru da mack il steal ur gash smoke ur hash jack ur cash den pimp slapu while my crew stand tal behine me u c im neva onli im always wit 1 ov my soliders nd were rolin 2nite reeady 2 bite ur sorry as bitchOriginally Posted by Who?
its iigh... use more multis....dont just rhyme one silable evry time use multipal silables iight...be cool
lmmfao, damn newbs. Ohh, it wasnt even good haha.
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