this is one hell of a mind blowing piece,the content yo got no words
of how to describe it i mean this is tighter than a G-string on an elephant
yo dude just keep more of this coming and i tell u man u'll be ruling this
9/10 .........
this is one hell of a mind blowing piece,the content yo got no words
of how to describe it i mean this is tighter than a G-string on an elephant
yo dude just keep more of this coming and i tell u man u'll be ruling this
9/10 .........
apreciate the feed, ill rtf when you drop a piece.
The concept and originality was great. The imagery was strong along with the emotion i felt. You got a nack for storytelling and i liked the choice of words u used to make it seem poetic and creative as fuck. What i didn't like is that the lines were stretched as fuck which made the flow and presentation horrible, but it was still a dope read.
I would of nominated this if ur flow was better instead of so stretched out.
pz and leave feed-back on "When I'm Not Looking"
DaMn at IJL picking this kid up. He'll be a dope addition to your crew. Ive been a fan of Makes for a while now, and this piece only solidified my thoughts on the potential he has. I can see him developing into one of the greats within a year or so ..
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^ thx man.
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this shyt was nice bra! The concept was great!....you had some stretched lines tha kinda ruined the song buhh the imagery was tiight it didnt get me bord it actually got me to read it all so thats a +! Its crazy how well you use ur words in this song!! I can see u love to write storys lol buhh thass crazy its not easy... overall tight shyt u got me looking foward for ur new shyt! i gotta say the onlii thing u gotta work on is makiin ur lines shorter!!
9.5/10
^ thx for the feed
^ thx for the feed.
great imagination man i enjoyed reading it
Vocab wuz ok but a lil stretched
structure wuz ok
everything else wuz great
use some Multis and everything will be good man
Good Work keep working at it
^word. Thx for tha feed.
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