The Life Of A Teenage Nigger

[KingEther]

Born in the Ghetto in May on 1989/
Never got Bully'd but troubles came at the age of 9//
I was a trouble maker and nobody couldn't fix it/
Never got influenced by Peer Pressure cause I was the one giving it//
When I got to Junior High/
I was thinking wat bad thing to do next so i never had a chance to be Fly//
Back in the days I was happy to be bad and alive that I should of told my mom Thank You/
Then later on I got Chased by PoPos and i broke my Ankle//
But im Hard Headed I still aint learn my lesson/
Didnt get locked up so that was a blessin//
There was a time I did get locked up, Ima tell you about it/
That change my life completely wouldn't be me withought it//
It was late at night and we had Gasoline and Matches/
We went to burn a cop car we thought the Police wouldnt catch us//
But they did catch us and then they locked us away/
And i came out before I had to go to the first High School Day/
And I dont regret all of it as of today//
When I got to H.S. I wanted to start over/
I couldnt niggas probably gonna sleep on me like they in a coma//
I had to let myself be known that Ether is back/
And if a nigga gonna test me he bound to get smack//
So life havent changed its the everyday routine/
Im trying to survive everyday and im only 16//

ALL THIS SHIT IS A TRUE STORY

[ItsCyrious]

that shyt is deep...hott..im feelin it...structures koo...flow is aight...

8/10

[Sobe]

the flow was ok..but some parts the flow was wack like

When I got to Junior High/
I was thinking wat bad thing to do next so i never had a chance to be Fly//

try to work on your wording and rhyme scheme.. it helps make it more interesting

but wtf @ the title.. and i wasn't interested in your stories with the police since i've heard the same shit about 878237 times before..but it's about your life so whatever..just stick to one story next time

[KingEther]

For your information not to get at you SOBE plz plz plz but that was true. Everything i wrote is real. So the other people that wrote that copy'd me and shit cause all that is real. I got locked up i was there for 3 months. Thats how i got to be into Music and Freetyling and other stuff.

[Dan Dare]

You need to post two links, to two threads you left decent feedback on, or this gets closed, thanks.

[Spit That]

the wording in the piece was extremely lackluster. The idea was not good for a net piece at all and once again you didnt word anything good at all. The Flow was barely above decent and out of all the lines nothing was quotable. This piece was very weak man. elevate

[Foreshadow]

The wording of your lines needs alot of improvment.. The flow was okay but the lines were streached and made the reader lose his place.. The storyline was decent nothing that hasnt been done before.. Keep posting...

[Issue]

hahaha, i thought it said teenage ninja! i will edit in feed in a bit, lol.

[KingEther]

This goes to Balderdash how do i two links so my thread doont get close down.

[*Peaches*]

this was nice... i can kinda relate to it an a way

[KingEther]

Thanks For The Votes I appreciate it alot.