A Line in The Sand

[Endeva.]

I used to be one for the drink, in a blink
but now I think…
I was on the brink of sinking in far too deep
Shrinking my sanity, consuming my life with grief
Deceit, getting beat by myself , by my own feet
By the Stealth of alcohol deleting precious memories…
My family tree, the girl standing next to me!
But fuck that now I’m free, now I’ve turned a new leaf
Made a promise to be honest, so that’s what I’ll be
No more problems…
Definitely, you’ll see, I’m so gonna change
I’m gonna refrain from drinking myself insane
No more rotting the brain, I’m not the person I became
Its like I got a new name, the same but more stable
Realized it was me to blame so I turned the table
Gonna prove I’m able, the will-power to succeed
Til she believes I’m capable of being the man that she needs
So fuck the speed, seed, beer, from now I steer clear
The nearest ill get to that is I’ll still chill with my peers
There’s no fear of slipping, dipping back into that
Cos my girl means more to me than all the cans stacked
And that’s a fact!!! At last…
Yea, The days have passed, sitting round lazing mashed
And its gonna last, cos now I’m on greener grass
On a patch that’s gonna make life less a task
For me and my lass, and that’s my only wish
To accomplish my goal and live a life filled with bliss


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[The Asylum]

First things first..
Work on rhyming more than just one syllable..
You did have a couple aright multies though..
Which helped your flow towards the end..
Content was solid.. But nothing spectacular..
Good work homie.. Stay at it..

[Foreshadow]

Damn Dev this was some dope ass shit right here man.. The emotion in this piece was fuckin dope.. & the whole damn thing was real interesting and it kept me interested throughout wondering if you were going to flip shit in the end.. The multies in this were crazy and everything just flowed so damn well..

[Endeva.]

^^thnx beac' appreciated.... just some real shit, nah mean..

[EyeBite]

this drop is good man........ the vocab was good and the rhymes were too as well...... the flow was good... the strucure was ok.....the topic was different and i like that....the title was a bit plain...but anywayz good job....keep it up...... have a good day
-return the favor:>http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=206173

[Endeva.]

^^thnx, i'll hit your piece, when i get round to it...