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    Jaded Sunset

    I won't stand to fight, When the world is just facing defeat
    Sinfinite was never a man, It was just a common belief
    When ever someone’s robbing the streets, or people calling police
    Its the echo of one path, That someone halted to meet
    I give thought with a livid mind, Live or die? Me decision was torn
    I reflect with timid eyes, Was this a plan, or was I naturally born?
    Or was it a mistake in the realm, Am I placed in a shell?
    Is this really my life? Or was it just a vacation from hell?
    If power is presence, Than I guess your stance comes from reign
    But if pain is just a feeling, Than why can't my heart numb my brain?
    What are the stakes? How much of this can a man actually take?
    Is this life torture, Or is death when a being fractures and breaks?

    If you take it back to the day, When my soul evaporated and died
    All my hopes and happiness past, Without saying goodbye
    Black cloth couldn't stand to hide a pair of confident eyes
    I would have sacrificed irises, to miss the vision that haunted my life
    I was to lead the strike, Young and unsure I tried to keep my composure
    But I had the love and support of my family, with a street full of soldiers
    Stealth like on rooftops, For revenge over a stomach of cuts
    But when we opened the door, I found that Another one shut
    The gang snuck in, The light and sound finally devoured us
    Than with the blink of an eye, Clips an Bullets came in showers
    I tried to retaliate, But fate had come and becconed
    My whole life had shattered all in a matter of seconds
    I was able to pretend to be dead, But I craved for revenge
    A plot to destroy their lives than popped into my head
    While they explored their finds, I shattered both my 9's
    Blasted away at their spines, While I heard laughter in the back of my mind

    Now I hope for a difference, When I look back at my fingerprints
    How could such terror and pain have been caused by a single kid?
    Now I seek to destroy the power sinfinite was forged with
    Redemption is key, Cus Second chances are rarely awarded
    So I've stopped the rhythm, Cut the strings to this villain
    Broke out of life’s prism, And found the key to this prison
    I broke the chains I've dragged, And the madness I'm cursed with
    I've lost my force of pain, My heart took the echo and reversed it
    Now I'm playing chess with god, But saving the pawns
    My sun of life never escapes the sky until the break of dawn
    So Sinfinite lies dead in a coffin, And I carry the weight
    I'm my old worse enemy, Known again as Arias Raith

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=201431
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2562589


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    Last edited by SinFiNite; June 14th, 2005 at 09:53 PM
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    Pretty good piece man, I felt the flow and the imagery was there........Structure and vocab was ok too.....I'd give this piece a 7.5/10.............keep up the good work..man.

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