Till I Collapse - my remix

[-=CHiGGA=-]

.one verse.

Till I collapse, i'mma keep spittin' flows like no alternative/
Till the day I drop, don’t front with props that ya spurn ta give/
Learn to live, and follow your dreams that your heart brings/
Don’t give up what u fiend, ‘cause one day all your hard work stings/
If I don’t go on, Hip Hop will die and I wont be who I made/
My life will feel incomplete and my soul will end up betrayed/
The adrenaline rush brought by the anger, are released on paper/
It calms the heart and mind, and evaporates the sweat vapors/
You see I got so much to pursue in my life, ambitions/
I’mma work my way up, and earn my place of recognition/
I’ll do it from any angle and I’ll reach it regardless the length/
If I feel weak, and wanna give up, I’ll search to find my inner strength/
‘Cause I need that to go on, I’ll make that my motivation/
And if I use that, I know I can achieve my destination/
It’s a way of life, and how things go, that’s the way I choose it/
So don’t abuse it, everyone’s got their own path for life and music/

[-=CHiGGA=-]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...14#post2559014

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...41#post2559041

[-=CHiGGA=-]

uppin'....

[-=CHiGGA=-]

Up......

[Vertikle]

Ok piece, but don't post freestyle like verses, if ya gonna remix the song......Do the whole thing..........vocab and structure was ok........flow was nice though....but you gotta do something different.........7/10.........ok job dawg..........

[sylent J]

yo it was a decnt piece you had good structure and flow and a good freestyle and a good job but like Vertikle sia dmaybe actully do the whole song overall iw ould give you a 6.5/10 keep at it

[-=CHiGGA=-]

thanks yall i'll keep that in mind