Wicked Sense

[Judge Judy]

Paul San...(silent pause erupts)


creatures invade a rotten domain, captive hidden death
hesitant imagining war crusade with every written step
ink streaks weep fear kept, questioning a unknown clue
cranium glued an eerie thought, still blundered, I drew...
pictured fued, with a rip curled few who demand a fact
irritating lack of conscience and moral sense attacked
now furiously strapped, attached to the wooden chair
folicles of long hear impair the vision of the one who scares
forced with last prayers, creature throbs on human tears
sniffing the red neck of a human, scenting the noticed fears
life ends here, terrorizing character strokes the bleeding speck
known of powers strong enough to wreck and snap my neck
finger nails check the soft skin, for a poched spot to puncture
stabbing at the bone fulled cheeks, a critical time....a juncture
thoughts unfunctioned, with a lack of thought.......fear builds
insanity gossips on living longer, oxygen out...like dreaded gills
blood cup spills, random inhabitant pictures, imagine my head
scattered intelligence dead, with foreshadows of death kept
tension left.......waking up from startled exorcist nightmares
staying on course started away from pesimistic night tares
peering a dare, upset featured alone tortured a poets soul
ink explode, with a hot sensation......but knowing its cold
control owned, writing thoughts crack a nerve and combust
painful lust of a fat blood ink, thicker than the earths crust
bothered ignorance shushed, continued writing his story
excrushiating detail of the nightmare hanuted blood and gory
tore thee writers mind, intense blistered eyes hide from pain
blackened slain of corpses invisioned himself....its insane
reign power stable, a irritated fable filled a wrong spot
blooded clots stop the writers thought, forgetting a plot....

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Judge Judy]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...97#post2506497

[Vertikle]

Not 2 good of a piece, not the best but not terrible, juss average.Juss found it was decent flow and good vocab.......imagery not the best......had a good vibe to it though.

pz 7 out of 10

[Judge Judy]

Not 2 good of a piece, not the best but not terrible, juss average.Juss found it was decent flow and good vocab.......imagery not the best......had a good vibe to it though.

pz 7 out of 10

lmfao. alright u herb. Die.

[Judge Judy]

two links.

Thank You.

brb, ill go check one

[Judge Judy]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...99#post2509099

[Marvman]

amazing rhyme scheme...
nice vocabulary...
the subject is deep...
a lot of imagery and metaphors...very good

i like the way he started typing his name then suddenly stopped because of the nightmare...very creative...

9.9/10

[Judge Judy]

Thanks

Uppin

[nolonger]

very nice peice here man..vocab was dope
flow was very nice i would of liken to see
a few different rhyme schemes in this but
it was a nice peice over all good read

av fools we running this shit.

[P.Status™]

This was heavy, Thought the flow was fluent throughout, Vocab was def Complex....I liked the bar structure and rhyme scheme....the imagry in this piece was painted well....

"control owned, writing thoughts crack a nerve and combust
painful lust of a fat blood ink, thicker than the earths crust"

^fav line, thought that was candle wax

up for a collab sometime? get at me on aim Insetplatinum

[vice_versa]

This was a decent peice, everything was there, flow,image,metas, all that....but nothing about it really jumped out and grabed me...know what i mean....but it was still pretty good i thought....

[Judge Judy]

Upppin