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    Vertikle
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    Never Taking Shit From Me

    You bitches ain't taking shit from me, never...............Haha

    Yeah


    My Mic's got hold, of the bold and yet brave.
    Pave golden roads before me......
    Yet when they die I'll spit on their grave.
    Behave like people crashing X into a rave.
    It's about my money, dummy......
    Yeah I know Jesus saves.
    But I need money, wishing I was juss hungry.
    Cause I want it all, till I fall.....
    You can't call me a dummy.
    Sweet like honey, powerful and it ain't funny.
    How ya gonna criticize, lives.....
    Plus trying to take from me.
    Done me so dirty, yet the shit don't hurt me.
    The way you act and seem....
    Makes me think ya not worthy.
    This verse be telling the truth, try to merk me.
    Then feel what pain is.....
    You'll be lower than the dirt be.
    Please understand everything's for me's a need.
    Hope the police don't catch me....
    Selling my fat bag of weed.
    You follow and I"ll lead, I started as a seed.
    From birth I burst into an MC,
    From pain I continue to feed.

    (x2)
    You ain't never taking shit from me.
    I'm so hungry.........so hungry...
    For the lights, camera's and money


    Little Feedback on wat ya'll think

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    You need to get two links, to two OMs you left decent feedback on, or this gets closed, thanks.
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    Vertikle
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    uppin for feedback

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    You've Earned a Custom Title! The Vortex's Avatar
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    so your telling me you took your time with this well its really not all that man and you the cheek to critisise my 2 minute freestyle

    then u ask for constructive feedback
    well fuck that
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    The flow wasent all that bad. You have to work on larger lines, and expanding your ideas; showing more emotion and shit. This was descent, i guess.. but you have some elevatin ta do mayne. I rae this 4.5/10 Your rhyms sheme was okay.. and the topic was semi-original, form your point of view

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    That second link is invalid. Closed.
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