Death Before Dishonour - Phobia & Deviate

[Violent.]

Up.

[Judge Judy]

Dope piece fam.

Everything went well, Deviates verse was excellent.....Vocab was amazing, and your rhyme scheme was great.....Phobia's was nice to, This collab was dope.............Im collabing next fool

Lol, But aside that, this is a nice piece.

Keep Dropping, Peace

[Ike Ill.]

Wah.
WaH.

Deviate - Try to work away from the samurai it was leik omg... You did a nice job ho.

Phobia - Good structure from both I can say it'was a good collab, I got the belt, I got the boots, Boy, lemme walk in the closet for somethin.

HELLPPPpPppp I got a bad date
HELPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP

*hahahaahaha*

G'job.

[Violent.]

And up.

[Obseen]

loved the concept of it takin the stoty from two sides.
it was nice an kinds poetic but i liekd it like that vocab was nice
i liekd the soldier one better personally.
the imagery was really strong in this could picture it in my head.
loved the rhyming in it aswell.

Battle engaged we rush forward as one, Guns blazing
I see red ahead, As I run forward my body raging
It aint phazing, Is there a reason for this bloody war
I battle in vein, Raging against opponents like a wild bore
I see limbs tore, A serenade of bullets pass through the air
My gun vs their sword, Try and test me if you dare

really liekd htis part.

A lone bullet swirls gracefully through the war cloud,
Strafing left in dissection metal greets metal disemboweled.
The metaphoric seperation of my enemies phallic power symbol,
The simple ornament of creations ridicule in two parts from the middle.
Raising the sword in symettrical segregation of my face,
A hoard of disillusioned soldiers grind across the animation of this place

liekd this aswell.


overall yeh this was very very nice described everything well liked reading it ill give it a 8/9 / 10 stay up -1-

[trujigg]

love the way you grabbed my attention w/ the imagery, you kinda lost me in the middle tho. but it was tight

[Awaken]

Pretty Decent Piece. Phobia, I liked your verse, but I really didnt like to read words that I can't even pronounce, I don't want to read it with good flow, then just come up with some chinese word or whatever that noone can pronounce lol. Deviate, your verse really stuck out in this piece, I really enjoyed it. You told the story pretty well, nothing seemed rushed, and everything made sense. Overall, a pretty enjoyable read.

[Deviate]

Thanks for all the feedback... It's appreciated. We won this round through our opponents no-showing, at least we got some feedback here though.