Queeny
This was an alright piece girl, your story line caught my eye.......and entertained me, which lead me to read the whole piece.......Liking the chorus part (mob deep) lol
One thing you should do, is incorporate a ryme scheme, and some mutlis, they will truely make it that much better girl.
But props, holla
Thank you kost!
I appreciate your advice and I will take it 4 sho.
& I'm glad that other ppl liked it.
QueenStyle
No Problem....Can you check my most recent, Two Faced Hero.
Done did sweety.
QueenStyle
Originally Posted by Ill Techniquez
I'm glad that you completely understood my open mic, props & thank you!
QueenStyle
Fa sho babygurl...I'm feelin this shyt...."There always be niggaz sayin females cant rap
Talkin so much shit like they askin to get clapped" u right bout that shyt.....keep on keepin it real an you'll go places.....
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Nice Shit Girl, Vocabulary Was Cool, Flow Came Out Well This Would Of Bin Better In Audio Though If You Could, Keep It When You Have Audio Nice Flow Girl
..Writting The Pages In Your Death Will..
thanx again you guys!
QueenStyle
shit gangsta baby, where is ya frum? i like my ladies loco... shit ya sound like some kinda mama baby...
anywayz, shit that was pretty tight... but i thought i already replied 2 that shit... w/e anywayz, i liked tha gangsta shit girl, very convincin, vocab aint so great but i was feelin that flow alot, got a nigga vibin wit sum o that shit, crazy baby... yea nice flow, great structure, gangsta message (thats my kinda shit there) coulda been a lil' longer, fuck chorus was longer than verse, i dono, ya should add onta that verse a bit, but i liked that shit alot... keep it up pc
str8 frum tha streetz o compton
Ta2 niggaz
I.J.L Reppin
Tatt And Blue Perhaps You Knew
Your probably the hardest female on the net, this is some Foxy Brown/Eve type shit, I love this song
you just nned more vocab, story is good, you barely had creativity but it is good
wow you sound pimp! I'ma work on my vocab, but I think that I sound wierd saying long words, they sound geeky. LOL, like I said I keep my shit short, but most ppl think I should make it longer! thanx for the feed.
lmao @ hardest female on the net, I'm a teddy bear till I get mad. Barely had creativity? hmm... I'll try to be more creative! Much appreciation for da feed!
QueenStyle
Not bad, not bad attall.
The language could of been upped, but the topic and concept were pretty good. Some real life shit mentioned too.
It was bit short for my liking but it was still an alright peice overall. A dope rhyme scheme was used though
didn’t have no faith, to me love didn’t exist
stuck with anger issues, man I’m always pissed
life is hard, I never told nobody the truth
about no problems or the times I got hit n abused
but fuck it cops are crooked n justice is fake
only time justice is served is when its too late
^^ Nice lines there
yo check out my shit girl, its called miss my dawgs, check in tha sig baby
I.J.L Reppin
Tatt And Blue Perhaps You Knew
iight ill check it
and thanx for the feed Phobia!
QueenStyle
For these streets like a fein for crack
but pullin me back
-aight 6/10
Its real got a nigga goin (ooh ooh) cuz no matter drama or gossip
my heart is your hood my dogs niggas i rock wit (get away)
-aight 5.5/10
Before you get clapped put the tougnes to two loose have everybody on the corner goin (ooh ooh)
holdin they mouth shock as fuck i just had to air that boy out (get away)
-bad flow 5.5/10
and now theres blood on my tims snitches callin 1 800 crime stoppers
when they see me they like (ooh ooh)
-weak 5/10
cuz they want that thousand dollars
and not only that police will die to catch a fucking collar (get away)
-aight 6/10
and i'm out of here ain't no telling when i be back
get rid of this gat
-weak 5.5/10
dog you know i flew (ooh ooh) hell out of dodge
nigga bout this paper ain't no time to be sitting behind bars
-nice 6.5/10
Ya life is all u got, fuck up and u gon pay
I don’t play, fuck with me n ima take it away
-weak 5.5/10
Popos on my back, tryna hide from the poilice
Ain’t no nigga out here wanna die on the streets
-nice 6.5/10
If ya pockets is empty and u ain’t got a crib
Then u ain’t got shit and u fightin to live
-true 6.5/10
No matter where I go bitches always actin dumb
Askin why my skins light n where I come from
-feel that 6.5/10
There always be niggaz sayin females cant rap
Talkin so much shit like they askin to get clapped
-wouldnt know nuttin bout that 6/10
drama, hate, racism every where I go
sometimes I feel betrayed by everybody I know
-feel ya...7/10
all da niggaz I got with all they wanted was sex
said fuck it n left, moved on to the next
-nice 6.5/10
didn’t have no faith, to me love didn’t exist
stuck with anger issues, man I’m always pissed
-feel ya again...6/10
life is hard, I never told nobody the truth
about no problems or the times I got hit n abused
-felt....7/10
but fuck it cops are crooked n justice is fake
only time justice is served is when its too late
-real...7.5/10
Overall- 7/10
The second verse was WAY better than the first...send verse had a good flow and was deep the first, not to be mean, but was whack.
Peep the battles in my sig.
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