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Thread: .::SS piece::.Jealousy wounds

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    Ok..

    Interesting piece...From the topic you chosen it
    seems like you didn't hit the topic directly but
    you actually did with a style I used before. Nice
    word usage to bring out the uniquenes of this piece.
    I really liked the beginning part

    "I stand alone and empty in a bled shadow,
    Infested, rotten like a dead pharaoh,
    Undigested thoughts thundering to be forgotten
    drip poison in my infected marrow,
    …My soul’s crested from a broken Cupid’s arrow…
    "

    Great imagery and emotion shown there. I really
    did like the word usage. I wouldn't be surprised
    if some readers however were confused and lost
    at the angle you chosen for this topic. Reason
    why I understand in my opinion is because I did
    something like this before.. Was called Spiritual-WarFear.

    anyways nice drop keep it up.

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