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    Sheddin Tears JUST Aint My Thang. BY. Small Town Kid

    (chorus)
    Even In The Toughest Times My Head Shall Never Fall, And Even If Im Shot Or Stabbed My Mind Wont Let Me Crawl,
    Im Forced To Live Life Emotionless Representin With Mad Game, But In The End I Gotta Say It Sheddin Tears Just Aint My thang.

    (verse)
    Its Was Around Two O'clock At Night, I Already Put A Movie In, Entiled Backside Of My Eyes, It Was The Best Its Ever Been,
    I Was All Tucked In Real Good, Felt Like Nothing Could Go Wrong, But Every Body Knows Thats The Time When Things Go On,
    The Day Just Felt So Perfect, On The Block Chillin Wit My Boys,
    There Was No Static From Haters, The Whole Day I Had Enjoyed,
    I Snagged Me Up A Session That Involved What Lovers Do, Not Even My Guys Were Havin Bad Times, Cause They Were Sexin Too,
    After My Lovers Session It Was Time To Make A Stop, I Dipped Out In The Ride And I Kicked It Wit My Pops,
    The Smile That He Wore That Day Could Not Have Flipped Around, He Strutted Like A King, He Even Wore The Crown,
    But Just Like All Things Bad Moments Have To Come, But Even In Times Of Tragedies, Tears, Shit I Had None.

    (chorus)

    (verse)
    Well The Night Time Flew Around And It Was Time For Me To Crash, I Put All Thoughts Behind Me, Just Left Them In The Past,
    I Said Later To My Homies, Ill See Yall Tomorrow, Little Did I Know That Tomorrow Would Bring My Sorrow,
    The Man That I Had Visited Had Took The Longest Nap, It Was Due To Natural Causes, Cause If Not Then Id A Snapped,
    My Dream Was Holdin Steady, The Girls In It Were Fine, And Even If I Broke The Law, Evidence They Couldnt Find,
    From That Point To The Next My Mind Went Straight Blank, My Brother Woke Me Up, What He Said Was Not A Prank,
    He Told Me Of A Tragedy That Completly Stopped My Heart, I Felt Lost Like A Kid, That Was Dropped Off In The Dark,
    My Mind Wouldnt Allow The News My Brother Had To Say, Ill Say It Was A Good Thing Cause If Not I Might Be Dead,
    The Idol In My Life Left And Was Never To Return, But Till I Seen The Evidence, I Was Num Like Loss Of Nerves,
    I Jetted To The Room Were My Mammy J Was Dust, I Yelled Into Here Ear Loud Enough To Make It Bust,
    She Hurried And Got Ready And Then Showed Her Movin Strutt, It Was If She Was A Track Star Cause She Left Me In The Dust,
    We Rushed Up To The Hospital And I Still Didnt Beleive My Kin, The Toughest Time In My Life And I Still Couldnt Shed Shit.

    (chorus)

    (verse)
    Well We Got Up To The Counter And I Got In My Brothers Face,
    I Said I Hope For You That This Aint Another Prank,
    He Told Me Once Again That I Had Gained A Loss In Life, The Only Thing That Keep Me In State That Was Alright,
    The Date Was August 14 At 2:20 AM, MY BRO HAD DROPPED THE BAD NEWS AND NEVER SHOWED A GRIN,
    WHEN HE TRIED TO SAY I LOST THE MAN THAT RAISED ME WITH HIS HANDS, I NEVER COULD BELEIVE IT EVEN IF HE PAID A GRAND,
    THE ROOM BECAME CLOSER AND MY MIND STRAIGHT EXITED, THE ONLY SITE I GOT TO SEE WAS HIS TOUNGE AND IT WAS SICK,
    I STOOD THERE FOR A SECOND THEN WALKED TO THE OUTSIDE, MY HEAD HAD ALMOST LOWERED BUT MY DAD STOOD BY MY SIDE,
    HES TOLD ME MANY TIMES THAT ALL PEOPLE WILL GO, AND TO NOT START OUT A SENTENCE WITH THE WELCOME WORD HELLO,
    IF YOU NEVER INTRODUCE THEM IN THEN THEY WONT BE IN YOUR LIFE, BUT THE MESSED UP SITUATION IS HE ALWAYS SAID GOODBYE,
    SO THROUGH FOLLOWING THE MAN THAT GAVE ME MY AMBITION, WHEN ITS TIME TO LET A LOVED ONE GO, TEARS YOU KNOW ARE MISSIN.
    Last edited by Small Town Kid; May 17th, 2005 at 02:07 PM Reason: messed up on a word

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    you need 2 links or this will be closed.

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    i like this, your topic was ok and your overall i understood it. but u need to fix up your structure-try to keep each line the same length
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    2 links to 2 open mics or this gets closed sir.

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    i need to know how to set up links
    send me a pm or post how to set up links so i can open another one

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    I liked this, it seemed like a complete song, not hard to read, flow was good, rhyming pattern good. Overall I liked it

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    this was good,stayed on topic,work on ya structure, i'd give it a 7.5/10

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    If you dont know how to post links then just put the persons name and title of the thread.

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