rile1 vs come get it

[I swallow]

10/lines
no crew votes
no dr
due in 30mins
you spit first

[rile1]

ComeGetIt? hmm u wish u could spit/
I didnt even read urs yet and I already need to take a shit/
to me ur very banal, while im auspicious//
go ahead say it, " why'd Rile1 have to come at me so vicious?"/
sorry dont be jealous that I took all ur bitches/
just to let u know they werent giving my mouth kisses/
treat u like a slave and have u wash my dishes/
remember u only get 3 wishes/
no matter which one u make, my words still leave u in stitches/
I already won this battle so hand over my ritches/

I need to practice my metaphors

[I swallow]

i caugth you outside justice
begging for stratchs siting there
like a faget wit ya leg in ya lap
get a shot gun cage in ya back
get ya whole craneum cracked
got on this fourm for the first time
killing this cat i had ta do it in the
day time cause in nigth itll be hard to
find him cause he so black i have nothing
else to say dawg its a wrap

[rile1]

ok..... how many rounds or should ppl start voting??

[I swallow]

we need votes

[rile1]

alright then ppl please vote and btw how do u up in a battle?

[rile1]

upping..... damn man where tha ppl at? I wish I could vote so that way I can tell them I have a battle that needs to be voted on sheesh

[rile1]

hey man how long u been writing? cuz really u didnt have any rhymes and barely any good metaphors just wanted to know if ur a newb or sumthing

[big j da fat boy]

yo i thought rile 1 won this battle because it seemed like come get it didnt even try but he had some punches nt many though

[rile1]

finally someone votes!! we still need more ppl please vote!!

[Munky]

my vote goes to u guyz suck balls

[rile1]

munky all u do is say that man lol

[BaMbAm]

rile 1 won dont gotta say anythin else

[D Ki$$]

i dont kno who won dis battle sucked

[Jawn Raw]

come get it
good stucture nice flow but you have a weak rhyme scheme and you have no complexity its like ya just started rapping or something. work on delivery and wordplay thats all i can really say cause that was weak.

rile1
you also need work but you had like that vicious line that got me you also need to work on punchlines and wordplay, personals n shit and work on ya dilevery and finisher lines cause it was pretty weak overall i think you got this by a little tab bit. peace