~Crucial_Times vs. Paramount (Topical-Time)

[~Crucial_Times~]

Topic is about time. i'm make it 16 lines so its even. Due 2 days right when both check in. this is my check in. good luck homie.

[RaNdoMz]

2 days wow.. thats a lot of time :S.. anywaiz.. good luck to ppl I'll check back in here when yu guys battle.. return the favour and vote on my battles please.. thx.. god bless..

[Paramount]

aight then 16 lines this is my check in ok

[Paramount]

…..Time can come to an end when the arrow is struck….
….Soon as it’s brought to a halt, time runs out of luck….
…..The era of this day is not used it is being shattered….
……Time keeps on going but our time doesn’t matter….
…...Seconds turn into minutes and minutes into hours….
……..Time is getting eaten faster it is being devoured….
………And as hours turn into days and days to weeks….
….Times keep on going faster that u can’t even speak….
..While weeks turn into months and months into years….
Close as it is our time goes quick it plainly disappears….
…...So as the same thing repeats itself time after time….
……….Our time is our life so watch it fall on a dime….
……....So life as it is… it is ticking like a time bomb….
..BOOOM! It explodes no guessing it just comes off….
…So just keep an eye on the clocks and the watches….
...Because our life time goes in a second so watch it….

[~Crucial_Times~]

Time clicks by and speeds like Hell is on a-fire/
U cannot stop its wrath no matter da-desire/
Times can be bloody just like in the Holocaust/
Innocent people and bonds be slaughtered like dawgs/
One day I may feel like I was livin in-heaven/
Next day I’m in dirt and my life is-draggin/
It almost seems like time is a terrible-knife/
Time flies so fast my mom dies a horrible-night/
Time is a horrible flow like a river that stops for no-one/
If u do get caught in it your dreams and plans are so-gone/
Days past by day by day…month by month…year by year/
It’s like time doesn’t have a heart and just gives us a tear/
Loved ones pass by and new ones quickly are replaced/
It’s like this word ~time~ is trying to beat us in a race/
Time walks a different path than the ordinary being/
Don’t think u can keep up becuz that is a false seeing/


good job paramount. aight lets get sum votes on this. feedback peeps. don't sleep on this.

[~Crucial_Times~]

uppppin 1. plz check this people. i promsie to return the favor. i now have enough posts to vote. i promise i will RTF. no fake bullshit.

[Murder C]

this was a real good battle but i think i am going to have to give this to crucial for consistency

[~Crucial_Times~]

uppppin. plz vote on this people. will RTF. thank u.

[liljayy921]

real good battle nice shit crucial i liked it i felt your better then the other dudes ya know you had some good vocab going on and structure nice man both keep it up

v/cru

[*One*Of*A*Kind*]

Nice battle, noth had nice verses but I was feeling more from crucials verse
nice vocab structure and emotion ....

..guys keep elevating and dropping

V/Crucial

[~Crucial_Times~]

upppin this baby. comeon peeps. no sleepin. the sooner u vote...the sooner this is closed...the sooner we all move on. comeon in.

[Shazz™]

real good battle nice shit crucial i liked it i felt your better then the other dudes ya know you had some good vocab going on and structure nice man both keep it up

v/cru

^^^^yup
and Paramount make your verse so is legebel to read and enough wit the "..."

[~Crucial_Times~]

upppppppin 4. plz vote on this so we can close this. leave a link and i will vote on it.

[XM]

nice battle but i wont speak on who won cuz i kno both of'em and plus Crucial's in my crew keep up the good spits both of yall

[RaNdoMz]

Paramount

…..Time can come to an end when the arrow is struck….
….Soon as it’s brought to a halt, time runs out of luck….
**Nice Opener.

…..The era of this day is not used it is being shattered….
……Time keeps on going but our time doesn’t matter….
**Good Point :P..

…...Seconds turn into minutes and minutes into hours….
……..Time is getting eaten faster it is being devoured….
**Good Point..

………And as hours turn into days and days to weeks….
….Times keep on going faster that u can’t even speak….
**Second Line Is Not Structured Well Kinda Dunn make Sense..

..While weeks turn into months and months into years….
Close as it is our time goes quick it plainly disappears….
**Good.

…...So as the same thing repeats itself time after time….
……….Our time is our life so watch it fall on a dime….
**Not Feeling It..

……....So life as it is… it is ticking like a time bomb….
..BOOOM! It explodes no guessing it just comes off….
**No Rhyme .. But Iite point..

…So just keep an eye on the clocks and the watches….
...Because our life time goes in a second so watch it….
**Iite Ending.
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Crucial Times

Time clicks by and speeds like Hell is on a-fire/
U cannot stop its wrath no matter da-desire/
**Nice Opener..

Times can be bloody just like in the Holocaust/
Innocent people and bonds be slaughtered like dawgs/
**Nice Imagery..

One day I may feel like I was livin in-heaven/
Next day I’m in dirt and my life is-draggin/
**Not Feeling It..

It almost seems like time is a terrible-knife/
Time flies so fast my mom dies a horrible-night/
**Deep .. Iite Line..

Time is a horrible flow like a river that stops for no-one/
If u do get caught in it your dreams and plans are so-gone/
**Not Feeling It.. but first line good simile..

Days past by day by day…month by month…year by year/
It’s like time doesn’t have a heart and just gives us a tear/
**Not Well Put out "gives us a tear"..

Loved ones pass by and new ones quickly are replaced/
It’s like this word ~time~ is trying to beat us in a race/
**Nice.

Time walks a different path than the ordinary being/
Don’t think u can keep up becuz that is a false seeing/
**Iite Ending..


Overall This Battle Was Pretty Tight.. But Paramounts Verse Was Overall better.. soo..

V/ Paramount.. B eZ RTF..

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