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    Still in the grave Johnny 6-feet's Avatar
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    The Resurrection (horror movie)

    Find Myself Some Help- Konstantine

    Dmitre the Nomad- Jekyll

    This is the 3rd version of this story i've done and definately the best one. If you think it's too long, tough shit, how the fuck could i condense this story any smaller? It's worth the read, i should know.



    The Resurrection



    Chapter 1- The Incident

    It was a dark night, walking down the street in the half light
    In the shadows, a group lurked with a sharp knife
    A couple strolling home, so unsuspecting
    That the end would with violence, artery wrecking
    The ambush had them surrounded in the blink of an eye
    Crushed by a press of bodies, thinking they'd die
    The leader stepped forward and slapped the girls face
    She's his ex how had him vexed, infused with a world's hate
    The guy struggled in his prison of strong, clutching arms
    It was useless, he couldn't move this, dive, duck or charm
    The girl died first, coughing blood and wailing in pain
    The guy was roaring in his grief, hate assailing his brain
    The leader stepped towards him, blade out with a snap
    He thrust forward and the guy's world faded to black
    The ambulance arrived too late to save their lives
    But the payback was coming to those sadist guys...


    Chapter 2- The Resurrection

    Karma comes back around or so it would seem
    There was 6 months of oblivion, although he could dream
    Eyes opened in the dark of the cold of the coffin
    The last air exhaled out from the soul of the rotten
    Hands stiff with rigor mortis moved out in the dark
    Pressed the lid and heard it splinter quick, scattered in sparks
    The earth shifted, the horror crawled out of the grave
    Stood straight, clothes ragged and shouted in rage

    "Revenge will be mine for the injustice i suffered!
    I have a deatlist of 4, i'll be crushing those fuckers!
    This is my crusade i made to bathe in their blood
    For my lost love and the live i could've lived, should!
    I'm prepared, my strength has grown and the spark is back
    When they see me they'll have a fucking heart attack!"


    The monster shambled off from the place of ressurection
    He'd freed himself, passed the first test, now for the next one...


    Chapter 3- The First of Four

    A door exploded inwards, smoke rose from its hinges
    As it cleared, the monster entered with elastic twitches
    Coughed a maggot out his mouth, a man was pressed in the corner
    Piss spreading in his jeans like a distressed toddler
    Catatonic with fear and vomit trying to exit
    He couldn't tried to flee the scene but he wouldn't have left it
    He was picked up by the throat and held, suspended in space
    Interrogated for the info to put an end to this race
    The man stammered "My 3 friends are out drinking in bars!"
    The corpse grinned and broke his neck, he fell, sinking in stars
    The next step was clear, the quest was near completion
    Time to reach out and leech 'em, humiliate and teach 'em
    The meaning of suffering, but with patience he left
    Leaving nothing but a wisp of his vapourous breath
    The only way he could return to and rest in peace?
    Was kill the killers, listen, you hear his pace increase?


    Chapter 4- Retribution

    The final task was upon him for bloody satisfaction
    With no need to pack guns for the following action
    He stood outside the bar where he knew his prey lay
    There'd be no parley on this apocolyptic day
    The door swung open with gasps from the clientelle, staring
    And screamed at his snarls, teeth? he might as well bare 'em
    He recognised the perpertraitors, fear swimming in viens
    The flash of steel, angry grimmaces, the lividness, feigned
    The first rushed to attack and caught a bottle to the head
    Hit the deck, the corpse reached down to throttle, he's dead
    The second drew a gun to paint the walls with gore
    He took the bullets with a smile, stood tall and roared
    The fight had left them, both made a bolt for the door
    The second was grabbed and shot by his own colt, hit the floor
    The last one, the leader, managed to make a getaway
    Tried to drop his persuer with a full beretta spray
    No such luck, he found himself in the same alleyway
    Where he commited the first crime, so now the tally's paid

    "You have any last words? Better make 'em a prayer!"

    He shakes from the glare, paralyised and impaired
    His knife was snatched from him and jabbed in his gut
    The same way his victim died, stabbed him and cut
    A sigh escapes from broken lips, now the task is completed
    The corpse returns to his gave, in the casket, retreated
    He lay down, crossed his arms and whispered his thanks
    For the chance to 'fix the balance' in this karmic life 'bank'

    His soul rose again, and the narrator departs too
    Until the times comes for 'Resurrection- Part 2'
    Last edited by Johnny 6-feet; April 17th, 2005 at 04:19 AM

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    ^lol at the feed...

    real nice story man...craaazy!it was long,but kept me interested all the way.i really liked the way the story evoulved,you were very descriptive with the details.the imagery was done very well,nice vocabulary and wicked metaphors man.i liked that u never lost the story,at all times stayed on topic.also liked how you painted the the monster's character(he really seemed thirsty for revenge and able to do the things he did)...i found the rhymecheme lacking in some parts,but your story and imagery more than compensated for that.Overall dope fam...Hope ya write part 2.Keep it up!

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    5 days and one reply? uppin this for you sleeping fuckers^^

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    41 views and one reply? jesus christ you fuckers are lazy. uppin this again^^

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    uppin again^^

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    This OM was DOPE AS FUCK. It read just like a novel. Multi's, metaphors and nice imagery and wordplay. 100 OMs and counting? You've elevated like crazy. I liked chapter 3 (the 1st of 4). I was feeling that verse the most. You kept me reading all the way thru til the very end, and I just wanted more. Dammit, that's how an OM is supposed to be dropped, yo. The ending was cool...hella violent, just how I like it. Can't wait for part 2...Props. (if you can, I need some more feed on my "you're in love (and you are stupid) OM"...the link's in my sig. It'd be greatly appreciated.

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    this shit is just too long man...if u want some more replies u should probably break it down or some shit

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    ^^^^

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    kuz dis piece was gud dawg it kept me reading for a long amout of time daym! anyway da story was gud,nice concept aswell.
    written voices makes hidden noises

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    uppin this one last time, thanks for the feedback^^

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