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  1. April 6th, 2005, 08:52 PM #1
    noncentz
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    street cypher eleete (hnr por vida nene)

    new shi mess wit it
    By momo 2 11 1 Hour Ago
    by noncentz(word~p)
    wat to do(expecting a child,hustle harder)
    By shameless 3 11 1 Hour Ago
    by noncentz(word~p)
    {}-----Breakin M Barriers-----{} ( 1 2 )
    By M Pulsive 6 28 1 Hour Ago
    by noncentz(word~p)
    EclypsE (2hoTT) [Ms] Chek it out boy
    By EclypsE 1 4 1 Hour Ago
    by noncentz(word~p)

    Spit rhymes my lines amplify…
    Rock flows to the point it solidifies.
    I sware these guys.....
    have done everything but jerk me trying to get a rise
    pricks grabbing on my dick...
    enough to look 5 times circumsized.
    What will leave you disturbed..
    is If shit flies im flipping you the bird
    so I dont have to annunciate something so ubsurd to words
    you could drink & drive.....
    and still wouldn’t get back your swerve
    so put in an order for beef and watch you get served.
    When it comes to murdering you on the mic….
    There’s no reasoning-
    this kids flavored and adds in~sult with no seasoning.
    Turn your breathing to weezing
    drink water to rhyme and start dry heaving
    Emcees bite so much they go through second teething.
    Im like napalm…
    disingrating anything within my 50 mile region
    In freestyles have you screaming
    leaving with 3rd degree leshuns.
    My skills crafted grafted
    with enough thought amassed with
    My brains width and the earge to go the length…
    anyone who needs they ass kicked
    is only a fraction of me trying simplifying 1 to the nearest 10th.
    Calling me out on open text
    is like concentual sex
    Im raping you on the mic cd vynil even mp3 deck..
    But what would you expect ?
    except being ripped at every aspect
    Placing you through stages of purgatory beat 16
    It’s only eminent to catch a charge of statutory and child neglect.
    Use my brain defects to diss you with no special effects
    And make your fans favorite dial reflect eject on radio sets.
    Last edited by noncentz; April 7th, 2005 at 01:30 PM
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  2. April 6th, 2005, 09:05 PM #2
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    uh it wasnt there really im not quite feeling it, the stucture is very bad and the vocab is decent but the flow seemed streched. i want feelin this
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  3. April 6th, 2005, 09:12 PM #3
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    ight not bad flow was passible...vocab was decent...overall content was good..ight nice...didnt really get the title thou
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  4. April 6th, 2005, 09:24 PM #4
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    the vocab and the rhymes were okay.

    you misspelled lesion. but that's fine.

    i wasn't seeing the flow.

    but not bad man, keep it up. i like your sig thing about pac and big.
    Last edited by Paragon; April 6th, 2005 at 09:25 PM Reason: misspelled 'not' - i accidentally put 'now'
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  5. April 7th, 2005, 02:27 AM #5
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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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  6. April 7th, 2005, 01:26 PM #6
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    Quote Originally Posted by Credz
    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
    the links are before the flow....vocab i feel had to be simplar inorder to get the punches my structure has always been fucked up but the content was hard i know it is i appreciate the posts and critiques and i will do better
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  7. April 7th, 2005, 04:13 PM #7
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    i fixed the verse up some
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  8. April 11th, 2005, 05:48 PM #8
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    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  9. April 15th, 2005, 04:20 PM #9
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    Wow im getting cyphers named after me now? Hmmm...interesting...hehe...not bad tho...you had some lines that the flow came off real smooth...but your core topic wasnt found...you should focus on that maybe? But overall this was real decent...my kinda playfulness with words...props...Peep one of pieces in my sig if you get time...prefereably Dont Call It A Comeback...or Just Aint Dope...Peace
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  10. April 15th, 2005, 05:14 PM #10
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    If you feel a line is really good, don't sacrifice too much of it out to have the flow be tighter. There were some parts where you could have tweaked a line without taking away the strength though, and cut down the length. Some lines stood out as having nice wordplay. There were words spelled wrong in the verse, run it through spell check, and post it to have it look more presentable. You had nice ideas though.
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  11. April 16th, 2005, 04:24 PM #11
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    pretty cool for an off the top cypher word. some solid punches (the flipping the bird line made me laugh). solid vocab and slightly erratic flow. the topic was plain boasting, but you tackled it well.

    a nice little cypher, good work fam.

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  12. April 16th, 2005, 05:37 PM #12
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    good vocab, flow was a lil dry tho, over all nice piece
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