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Thread: Old Railroad Tracks: SS verse (vs. Awaken)

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    Na~Ledge
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    Old Railroad Tracks: SS verse (vs. Awaken)

    Old Railroad Track


    Awaken to a beutiful picture, in the skyline the sun shone bold
    God's perfection, perfect day for me, pops, and granps to take a stroll
    Shot the breeze, enyoy the day and converse on current topics
    Unitl we were unexpectely distracted by a too familiar object



    Three generations converged in a conversation while on a breif walk
    Expressions turned stone as our progression came to a sudden hailt
    Rage abruptly swelled as open eyes gazed at intangled wood and steel
    Blended with acceptance, knew at this boundary I had to yeild
    Beyond that border dewelled those with pale skin pigmentation
    Basking in jubulation as a result of their respected social situation
    Established prominent school systems, six figure annual incomes
    Decision makers, promise brakers, my town's key holders of wisdom
    Left me envy stricken, longing for the lax life on that side of town
    Cross the tacks, where peps with my complection were seldom found
    Unless engaging in meaningless occupations for less than miminal pay
    While aquiring uneasy glances, pre-generalized to posess criminal ways
    Are we such a plague to your presence? All we want is some respect
    Instead listening to mumbles of "nigger" come from under their breath
    To be percieved as equal instead of branded with pesant status
    But that reality is a dream where low self-esteem runs so rampit
    Surpressed by our environment, victims of generations of bad habits
    Hard to find life's quality when quality of life is barley sub-average
    Guess the more things change........the more they stay the same
    And although mangled and weathered those old tracks still remain
    So I allow the rage to subside and replace it with peaceful compliance
    Unhappily acknowledging two disconnected races unspoken alliance
    They don't encroach our boundary.......and we do the same in return
    These lessons in racisim many generations have been forced to learn
    Yearn for change to no avail, was unwillingly compelled to face facts
    I can't cross thoses old railroad tracks............................I'M BLACK
    Last edited by Na~Ledge; March 31st, 2005 at 02:28 PM

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    Na~Ledge
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    uppin for feed............

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    Very nice piece good luck in your battle. Should win with that verse. I've seen you around. Should drop more your shit is very ill.

    I know the topic was picked for you but it was a nice verse considering. the vocab was brilliant n the flow was pretty nice. Nice to see that the lines weren't simple and nice to see that the rhyming words were varied and complex. Got some skill there.

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    Established prominent school systems, six figure annual incomes
    Decision makers, promise brakers, my town's key holders of wisdom

    Guess the more things change........the more they stay the same
    And although mangled and weathered those old tracks still remain

    Overall I'd give this 10 outa 10

    Hope thats addiquate feedback. Kepp up the good work
    Fuck a Sig!

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    That shit was hot no doubt about it

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    that we riddled some middleman who didn't do diddily
    ~Big Pun~


    I rub your face off the Earth and curse your family children
    like Amityville drill the nerves in your cavity fillin
    Insanity's building up pavillion in my civilian
    The cannon be the anarchy that humanity's dealing
    A villain without remorse, who's willing to out your boss
    Forever and take all the cheddar like child support
    ~Big Pun~

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    Na~Ledge
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    thanks for the feed guys................uppin for feed

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    uppin

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    Na~Ledge
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    upping again

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    not that it fuckin matter but...........uppin

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    that was very nice man good work. very true and it makes you think at the same time. nice work the word choice was very good and the imagery was also nice. i like how you took such a cliche phrase and brought it to life with a new twist on it. i like how you incorperated the family and the different generations to show that we move forward but the same problems still exist. very deep piece. some nice multi's but the best part was the story and the message. the ending was good but i feel like the last line could have been worded a bit better. but i am one picky honkey so meh. i really liked this and i hope you get the win.
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    Na~Ledge
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    thanx for peepin it fam

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    last uppin I guess

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    Bump. I like your stuff has a message and you get to it. None of that side crap like so many of these other guys. Snap that was downright dope. I think I coulda rolled that one and smoked it.

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    Na I just remembered I never left you a feed on this…
    I enjoyed it a lot…I like the way you’ve approached the topic,very creative.Had a very good and ironic ending.The imagery was done well as you always do it,thru the use of good vocabulary.What I liked the most that it was just so good in almost every part of it.It flowed well,and just kept me interested on what you were gonna say next.Too bad Awaken didn’t show.All that trouble…I think he showed in some way,read yours and understood he didn’t stood a chance…
    Peace man!
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    Na~Ledge
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    thanx K

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