Keystyle

[Taeisbeast.]

Some people say that I'm quick witted, I just spit my rhymes authentic
Like Jerseys, hopin u get in it
Its not really what i say or do, I'm just tryin to confuse you, whether or not, you even got a clue...
To admit it, get it... these lyrics i ripped it
Like a bunch of takes at the mic, it only takes me minutes
To drop somethin hot, to where my mic explodes
Flows overload faster than a computer rebootin over blown
Got this whole rap game thrown, like 50 cent, where I'm speakin to much over my throne
To see if I even got what it takes, i take the same mistakes overbaked
With or without white out...like Im on a correction break
If i ever had beef, I'd cook it...Like all the other reservational emcees I eat..I book it
I make the mic shook before i even spit, cuz it knows before i release the blows and rip, and lash out at it
To traumatize the waves, before i back out on it

:Switch:

Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer
And its only 1 per word, that i word a verse before i murda da ink even after i rehearse
Its common sense, to rap common on da tracks bombin
Like spiritual believers, Its only a Omen

[..::~GhOsT~::..]

fav part...


I make the mic shook before i even spit, cuz it knows before i release the blows and rip, and lash out at it
To traumatize the waves, before i back out on it

:Switch:

Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer
And its only 1 per word, that i word a verse before i murda da ink even after i rehearse
Its common sense, to rap common on da tracks bombin
Like spiritual believers, Its only a Omen




was feelin the top portion as much, the third bar wasa lil choppy on the flow...

i liked the last part cuz it made me want to read them twice


over all: cool drop

[EXcaliber]

that was whack.you cant rap at all.if u mad lets battle bitch.

[Taeisbeast.]

^^Always have dumbasses sayin shit...and um Ex, you dont want to battle me dawg...go take a ticket and wait in line....damn...herbs

Uppin on feedback people

[JBriz]

Good complexity, Nice wordplay too. I suggest you work on the structure. Its hard to read like this. Try putting it in bars, like:

I went out wit ur mom
shes and uncle tom

Like thatl, Other than that good flow, keep it up

[M Pulse]

Nice verse but u used the word it a hell of a lot

Nice drop, keep drop nice shit

dont center it though, makes it harder to read

hit my new open Mic up

[Lyrical]

It was a little different. You can use rhymes well, but your not good at layout. But overall it was a pretty decent verse. You just need to practice a little bit, you'd be a pretty good MC.

The best part was the end.

"Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer"

[silent j]

yo nice drop

[Taeisbeast.]

Anymore feedback...holla

[Taeisbeast.]

Anybody...feedback...lets gooo

['--'Taser.--.]

EHH NOT BAD.

ight drop.. also , check the open mics for the dis to ex..

something we all can enjoy

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[_-~Ill~-_]

good drop

dope dawg
kinda weird but Ill

rtf in sig mayne

[CrazyCarl]

Your structure needs work. The verse doesn't look presentable. Even though it's a keystyle, you can still have it look formal. Work on ending the line at the rhyme. The reader can pick up the flow easier. Maybe work on some writtens to a topic, where you can have more time to plan and edit your lines to have a smoother flow.
Thanks for checking out my open mic.

[Taeisbeast.]

Thanx for the feed peeps...oh and Credz i dont understand what you mean...sorry plz explain