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    Focused - Old Piece

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    Yall aint never gonna beat me... Plus yall soft and wack
    Yall cats is nuthin... Thats why i brush you off like plaque
    Just sit back, and if an ill rhyme is made, Just dont sweat it
    Cuz like an out of order arcade game, you wont get credit
    It's pathetic, and most of you cant match what my pen holds
    It's like giving 11 emcee's deals, just to watch ten fold
    not drunk, just high, yall dont know what sweating brings
    So instead, i stay around joints kinda like wedding rings
    Plus i dont ever mix words, or give you anything to dispute
    I just 'cut to the chase' like CNN and police pursuits


    Yall know im heading for success faster than nascar speed
    Plus its true... my styles 'off the chain' like 'lost car keys'
    There's no way u can break down, ya motor aint even startin
    Yall the type to buy a 'sale'-boat and think you got a bargain
    And while i be puttin in overtime.. Yall be on that sudden shit
    Thats why my clever material is like 4 + 4, you only get 'sum' of it
    The two words to describe me... would be talent and respect
    So fuckin with me, will put ya 'life in jeopardy' like 'Alex Trebec'
    Yall about to be 'take'n-a-part'.... Similar to 'hungry actors'
    Then i'll snap ya neck, like you was doing the bungee backwards

    Have you strugglin for breath, tuggin between life and death
    They say nobody has the answers, but im the type to guess
    So fuck ya wealth, cuz you really dont wanna test my skill
    Plus yall 'paper aint long' yall just tryin to 'stretch ya bills'

    So if you think you can beat me, step up to the challenge
    Cuz you wannabe vets..will end up tossed like fruit salad

    Word.....

    Left feed on:

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2214320
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2214459
    Last edited by Uhb Knock Shush; March 25th, 2005 at 07:12 PM
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    [B]damn that shit was harsh.....but you beat em down...they cant speak they got a leak in their beak.......

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    You had a lot of wordplay in this, definitely keep that up. Some ideas worked better than others, but there were a few nice ones. Keep practicing in battles to hone that skill. The verse was structured good, made it easy to read.
    Return the feedback
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    aiight not bad dogg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! pz....7.5/10

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    This was a real nice verse it was a good introduction from you the punches were tight some of em i was laughing my ass off a couple were average but there was nothing in this verse i could hate.
    Your vocab and structure were fine youve got a nice flow too.

    Return the favour.
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    Good look on feedback ill hit up your OM's
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    that was whack.if u mad at what i said then lets battle

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    Who are you ? lol I dont even know who you are the only forum i have posted in on RB is this one noob lol get outta here
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    Sick nice son, Lots of quotes in dis son, 8/10.

    Keep the work up son.

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