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topic:Im souldier
topical:almigthy thug E vs Enermous
10+lines
house rules....
due thursday this week.......
topic:Im souldier
i spit tomorrow..............you can spit now.........
Is da topic not ment 2 be Im soldier by any chance!!!!
yes soldier.............when you gonna spit..........i spit today.........luck you dude.....
yo my verse...............yo....yo...........
standing on border be careful never cross it,
care the fuck when that fucking fat boss spit,
whos make the beat ou that crazy mosh kid......
but this soldier keep standing hes place,
not stop raining,keep still little smile in his face,
whats you talking what is this case,
noone told,no need information,ring the some number,
buy the tickets from railwaystation,and nomore pation....
restart standing with gun,the real soldier,
no need fucking bomb,get the eyes out for his thump...
call for his mom,ou baby we have son...
so you can stay there,we dont need you,
keep yourself man,mom dont feat you.....
care the fuck of crocodiles which try eats you....
by the way what our kids do,other is grow man,
and younger is six too,fuck i use pistol......
you mean that basketball team,like you will do.....
fuck you mom i gonna kill you,silt you,that is shit cool....
No really i hardly miss you,whach that monkey its try piss you...
snake on you penis its try to lips you.......
fuck this jungle soldier life now is over,
i been like Tarzan,even get shower.....
but i really like this monkey girl they give their ass,
but only then if you can run so fast,
what i have for eating,just one trash...
some bank book,chance for this can...
its gone eated from my hand,i was hungry,
this fucking soldier life moved in Hungary.....
live there whole life,low life,whole time,
say what say but this is my life.
wheres THUG E.............this day is due day.......so hurry up.......
WILL VOTE WHEN DUDE DROPS HIS VERSE........................
BUT IN THE MEANTIME CHECK OUT THIS SICK BATTLE BETWEEN :
KALIKOZE911 vs. Ayduu
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=178177
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How does a soldier feel fighting a war?
Does he always know what he is fighting for?
Maybe he knows but doesn't understand,
why he is alone in a faraway land.
Like so many others he is there for a cause,
And like the rest he doesn't pause.
He has a job that he does well,
even as his best friend beside him fell.
How does he feel when he hears the news,
of violent protests from the ignorant few?
His shame is great, the pain goes deep
he feels compassion for the dead at his feet.
Ders mi verses!!!
Uppin peeps plz vote!!!!
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almighty had betta rhymes n enermous's were too simple
thug e also had betta flow
v/ almighty thug e
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Celestial
Enermous...what the fuck was that?...dude...learn some structure...you didnt even rhyme most of the time and you rambled on about the weirdest shit....damn man....if you stay of topic more...you'd have a much better chance...
Almighty...sorry its taken so long to return the judging favor...
Your verse was pictured...but very limited...decent rhymes...nice flow...use broader words....as well as more eventful instances...also...show some more detail...
He has a job that he does well,
even as his best friend beside him fell.
^ Fav. line
Flow: Al
Multis/Rhymes: Al
Wordplay: neither
Personals: -
Punches: -
Vote Al
Please return the favor too...link in my sig...
Yo Flowz could u plz poll vote it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
--=|Breakdown|=--
Enermous
standing on border be careful never cross it,
care the fuck when that fucking fat boss spit,
whos make the beat ou that crazy mosh kid......
but this soldier keep standing hes place,
not stop raining,keep still little smile in his face,
whats you talking what is this case,
^^Um..NO!
noone told,no need information,ring the some number,
buy the tickets from railwaystation,and nomore pation....
restart standing with gun,the real soldier,
no need fucking bomb,get the eyes out for his thump...
call for his mom,ou baby we have son...
^^What the hell are u thinkin
so you can stay there,we dont need you,
keep yourself man,mom dont feat you.....
care the fuck of crocodiles which try eats you....
by the way what our kids do,other is grow man,
and younger is six too,fuck i use pistol......
you mean that basketball team,like you will do.....
fuck you mom i gonna kill you,silt you,that is shit cool....
^^Not again
No really i hardly miss you,whach that monkey its try piss you...
snake on you penis its try to lips you.......
fuck this jungle soldier life now is over,
i been like Tarzan,even get shower.....
but i really like this monkey girl they give their ass,
but only then if you can run so fast,
what i have for eating,just one trash...
some bank book,chance for this can...
its gone eated from my hand,i was hungry,
this fucking soldier life moved in Hungary.....
live there whole life,low life,whole time,
say what say but this is my life.
^^This shit man....:sigh:
THug
How does a soldier feel fighting a war?
Does he always know what he is fighting for?
Maybe he knows but doesn't understand,
why he is alone in a faraway land.
^^Not bad
Like so many others he is there for a cause,
And like the rest he doesn't pause.
He has a job that he does well,
even as his best friend beside him fell.
^^So-so
How does he feel when he hears the news,
of violent protests from the ignorant few?
His shame is great, the pain goes deep
he feels compassion for the dead at his feet.
^^Aight finisher
Overall: The battle was weak....both need to elevate some more. ANother topical battle gone to hell. but it was ok. GOod shit from both of you tryin to attempt. Basically both need to elevate more especially you Enermous...damn what the hell are u thinkin with that verse...go get some help.
Reason: My vote goes to Thug...his flow was straight to the point and has some sense..E was just scattered everywere..keep the shit neutral man...stay on point.
Keep it up and get better...
Hit my battles up though...RTF
Nice vote man fanx!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!............
Uppin people will u vote on dis shit plz!!!!!.........
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