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Thread: A Guy Thing

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    G-Money
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    A Guy Thing

    i stay in bitches heads like pantene pro-v
    she wanna cuddle after sex bitch must not know me
    then wanna bug me to death to give her a massage
    when im done i tell her call a friend i wanna menage
    i stay surrounded by women thats my entourage
    at my crib got pictures of booties as my art collage
    i like those silky soft coconut shell complexions
    n when that fat booty touches u, u get instant erection
    im talkin instant connection, sex,love, n affection
    then when ur done let her tell all her confessions
    after all the talkin is done invite her to the shower
    bend her over face forward n beat em with power
    give her a lil kiss but not too much
    when ur done let her know not to touch
    get her dressed, tell her sweet goodbyes n send her packin
    jump in the bed pull out the rolodex n get the next gurl crackin


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167511
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=148657

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    The multis helped the flow for this. Had some wordplay, it works well in a piece like this. You were descriptive in spots, could have made it more story-based. Alright ideas, keep it up.
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175493

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    MXC
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    this just right for the style you drop
    seen other work from you shit still hot

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    G-Money
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    Thanks For The Feedback ....keep It Comin

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    was a nice drop, but thought it could be longer, nice multis...other than that would like 2 C mo'......holla....

    KALIKOZE9/11

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175764
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  6. #6
    G-Money
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    yeah i could of but this was a lil collabo with stats so i dropped real quick so we could see the response we'd get.... lets see some more feed.....

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    G-Money
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    uppin..............................

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    Lol topic was ok, nothin new but you came pretty fresh on it. you had good vocab on here, it all flowed well. multis were strong, wich helped the flow alot. you had a few played ideas/conecepts on here but i wasn 't surprised considering the topic, but overal you came pretty decent on this, sorry i 'm to tired to leave longer feed, so i 'm just givin the basic idea of what i think of this, and you came pretty good. keep at it!

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    it was.....funny, mainly because that's what most men DO think about...

    the topic was eh, ok... the rhyme scheme and flow were easy to get but the metaphors and wordplay were simplistic...

    sounded like it would've been better freestyled...
    6/10

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176604

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    yea this was ok....I mean kinda played but u found a way to make it interesting to read...the multis def helped...stay up..pz
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    LiL' T
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    that was hot......i was feeling that rapping piece

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    Topic was funny, multis helped out a lot with the flow of it which made it sound better. Other than that it came sort of funny... More of "im so gangster" sounding coming from you. Though the structure needs to be longer and straighter. I didnt enjoy it as much as other things I read... Maybe its just because we have a different view on things.

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176338

    ^ thanks.

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    had some sick flow and vocab but i didnt like your concept. didnt like the story or the imagery here...didnt really like a period. felt the flow but thats about it...i dunno what to say...keep writing

  14. #14
    G-Money
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    thanks.... i will keep all those things in mind, in some parts i was tryin to make it a lil funny, but i appreciate the feed....

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    KaS
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    the flow was reallll nice... you're one of the few kids i've seen on this site that probably actually rap instead of just write shit... props on that

    work on your multis

    in my opinion punchlines should only be occasionally used in non-battle verses... but when u use em make em nice.... work on your creativity with punches

    but this is one of the nicest verses i've read here not because of the lyrics, but because it reflects a knowledge of actually rapping... something rare among textcees

    props
    7/10

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