Diary Of Destruction(Last Post)

[warchild]

While im writing im constantly pacing and numb
My rhymes put evil in you like a satanist raping a nun
Dont kid yourself motherfucker my metaphors are magic
Death is on my doorstep so i better forge a classic
All of us on earth are crazy there's no love on our land
No matter what you say we all have blood on our hands
You either get them clean or let them gather more dirt
I really am trying to change but i gather more hurt
I havent got an answer and my breath screams why
I hate to sound so sick but death seems wise
Cause its gonna be so hard to change my lifestyle
I can be a goodhearted guy but also quite wild
Im poor and my paranoia put me on to drink and drugs
Im looking for a new way to write so ink and blood
Are my new tools which i use to sketch my rhymes
I pray to a god that dont exist to bless my mind

Hook:
Open your mind as i take you through a diary of descruction
Anybody who dont appreciate what im saying then fuck em
My mind is like nothing youve ever heard so just listen
Life is diseased depressing and dirty so death must glisten

I open up my pad grip my pen and watch my ink spill
Try and capture my contradictions and then think ill
And watch with wide eyes as the words scatter over the page
I try and put all the real things that matter over my rage
My concepts burn a hole in your conscience
Everything youve ever been told is just nonsense
Its a must to walk around with an open mind
Also keep your eyes open for politicians with broken spines
No matter what i say just support my reasons
Im so far into dementia ive started to extort my demons
Im from a place where true thugs live
Who sell this and that and who love bids
So the bigger picture is what im trying to show you
Why is life such a bitch? yeah im dying to know to
Ive been saying whats real so how shall i end the verse
Fuck it call the devil tell him to send the hearse

Hook:
Open your mind as i take you through a diary of descrution
Anybody who dont appreciate what im saying then fuck em
My mind is like nothing youve ever heard so just listen
Life is diseased depressing and dirty so death must glisten

This a couple of verses of some introspective stuff kinda of a message to it to if you read it properly this is my last post so id appreciate some feed, PEACE.

[warchild]

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176386
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176281

[Na~Ledge]

This was really good. I've seen better from u before but this didn't dissapoint. Sad to see it was ur last post though. Anyway was really feeling the hook thought the idea behind the whole thing was a good concept. Think it might come acros even better in audio. Ill post.

[AbusivE]

as na ledge said, this sounds like something i 'd hear in audio. the topic was ok, it seemed you started out different then changed after a few lines to a different topic, wich i liked.. i didnt see as much multis as there could be, but i may have just missed them.. but yeah this was a pretty good drop, emotion was there, your structure was good.. was a good read, nice drop

[Komatose]

this was a nice lil song..had a good concept and good word usage. everything flowed well and i thought it was pretty good. most importantly though the entire thing made sense, thats always the key. nice job. return the favor and vote on one of my battles at the bottom of my sig.

[Chris Black]

I like it. The flow was ill. Emotion was nice. It was a decent drop. The first verse was the best. Keep writing, homie.

My Open Mic: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176429

[K9_THESHIT]

it was a good drop.felt yar ideas behind the piece.ya had good vocab and structure.some multies would make sound it better,but still the ideas are good and ya stood on topic."I open up my pad grip my pen and watch my ink spill,Try and capture my contradictions and then think ill"-liked how ya started there.good post...and thanks for replyn on mine.Keep it up

[Provoked Images]

it was pretty tight flow wise, would make good audio...
but topic was kinda boring and the multi's, meta's and etc could have been better...
good open mic but needs work...

5/10

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176604

[warchild]

Uppin.

[Baron Mynd]

Ehhhh ..
.. You seem to like this style of writing, but its one that doesnt really appeal to me. It seems to stray from one topic to the next very suddenly, without there being a chemistry to link the two there. It makes the piece very jagged, choppy, you know? Id prefer a much smoother piece, moving effortlessly from one thing to the other. This really isnt my cup of tea, though - dont get disheartened, it was fairly well planned out. You had the multis and a rhyme scheme there, its just not something that appeals to me.

Take it how you will.

[BeRLin`S BesT]

aight aight...this was way above average I gotta say...u had a shitload of multis plus u stayed on topic and simple flowed very nice...good drop dog....u had some sick lines in this like the beginner was off the chain...likes....pz

[warchild]

This is my last post so im gonna up it 2 more times heres number 1.

[DJsmokey]

lol this was pretty sick man... i liked it...


My concepts burn a hole in your conscience
Everything youve ever been told is just nonsense
Its a must to walk around with an open mind
Also keep your eyes open for politicians with broken spines
No matter what i say just support my reasons
Im so far into dementia ive started to extort my demons


flow was a lil choppy, but for the most part it was pretty good. tightwork!

[Baron Mynd]

This is my last post so im gonna up it 2 more times heres number 1.

Your last post on the board?

[warchild]

Yeah this is my last post on here im uppin this for the last time appreciate the feed im outta this motherfucker PEACE.