Just some yellin

[Sensation]

Long but easy to read, hopefully. So check it out....

thinkin of a schemes to get rich quick
somethin to get u stuck between a girls two tits
gotta smoke the blunt and take two hits
accurate so if shot 3 times never does 1 miss
these are risks we take to get this mess
stupid if u go somewhere without ones vest
guys that loose lives didn't protect yo chest
goes to show don't use yo nose to do dat blow
have you askin who moves those two hoes
yo I'm quick on my feet an quick to think
high so my eyes narrow like ones chink
but I promise you'll never see my eyes blink
wide alert to sniff out exactly what stinks
they call me the money transport smart enough
to undercover bitches that move to extort
money made by lives paid criminals aid
young guns slayed by the powder you snort
not there when drugs picked up at cubans ports
but we make moves the business of import export
the midwest be my place that i lay to rest
its my home fort never a motion or moves to abort
drama and tension stupid moves made mentions
young cats right out of a thugs detention behind bars
come ta think we got bars spit by thieves that steal cars
young impatient close to makin it but ask how far
and how many suffer from the collection of scars
remeniss hot heated moments bullet wounds
listenin to 2pacs tunes its a plate of destructions and dooms
wake up blowed in a new girls in rooms
got mad respect for fallen one tombs
i'm all about reppin whos lyrisist flow booms
don't think i spit imaginary lines i get
by mixin two plots to movies that i bit
you'll get shot if you dismiss the feel of my shit
respect whos hot deprive depress and destroy who not
i came to represent my block
Sensation and i'm from the WI we drink and get dwi's
where your thought just pass up by no thoughts to think just why
we buy pounds of weed to get us high
buy guns and take your lives
no emotion as we drive by bullets sprayed as it catches yo eye
come around here but don't be scared to loose a life
its all good you'll hold your own we got bitches livin scared to use a knife
players club communication makin the right connections
makin moves toward the right directions
plenty of hoes to sooth the erections
bullet proof glass for bullet deflections
lettin the bullets to my techs spin
ain't scared to knock one in ones chin
a one on one or a two on two who knew that my crew is the one that wins

My links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...10#post2154210
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...219#post2050219

[Sensation]

any feedback??

[Sensation]

Bump till someone replies

Goods and Bads...let me hear it.

[AbusivE]

You need to try expand in vocab, it 'll give you more space to get more creative and complex with your lines, cause this was basic. i also didn 't see to many multis, try workin on that alot, it'll support your flow alot, even though your flow in this was decent. your structure in this was pretty good, except near the end some lines were kinda stretched, but you did pretty good on that. this was an ok drop, but next time try a different topic that 'll allow you to get more creative with it. keep droppin stuff and you 'll elevate in time!

[AbusivE]

return the favor:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...27#post2156427