Jekyll & Baron Mynd - Dear Mary Jane..

[Jay Mel]

ROFL, this shit was dope man....But a little more into the weed would have been great and it turned out to be Peter Parker....This shit was fucking I.L.L. one of the best i seen on this site...Fucking stay up man...You got skill

[Dan Dare]

Thanks guys.

[Chris Black]

This was aight. I didn't like the rhymecheme and break up of lines though. It kinda through the flow off for my. Crazy how you both got the same style. Ok shit. Keep writing.

My OM: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175565

[Dan Dare]

Rofl, I actually don't usually write like that, just thought I'd try it for this collab. I'll take a look at that now.

[K9_THESHIT]

nice concept...nice drop.could've been structured a bit different,considerin' it's a letter;olso could've started different(not a very good start to it).ya had some good lines in there,but nothing out of the ordinary.funny ending with the peter parker shit;made me smile.mo' or less it was ait,but ya could've touched mo' ideas on the drop...

return the fav
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175929

[Jonezy]

This is aight, actual concept was good, very short though
vocab had its ups and downs, everything was worded well
but i couldnt catch a flow.

lmao @ pied piper

[Komatose]

very creative. i like the idea and they way you control'd it throughout the whole piece. very nice work, keep it up..1

[Moniker]

nice to see Baron back. i will edit this with a comment later.

[Baron Mynd]

Lol, sup dude?

[Baron Mynd]

This was aight. I didn't like the rhymecheme and break up of lines though. It kinda through the flow off for my. Crazy how you both got the same style. Ok shit. Keep writing.

My OM: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175565

Howe can you NOT like a rhyme scheme? Lol. Half the kids here dont use one anyway, so be thankful we even take the time to use something few actually pick up on ..
The break up of lines is simply, my style. Helps empthasise the multis if nothing more, its easy to read through and gives the reader a better sense of when to pause etc ..
Lol at us having the same style .. I usually write like that, guess he just switched his up - which, is more so a credit to Jeks. The flow to this is dope, reads really smoothly - not sure how you didnt catch it, try reading through again. Lol.

[Baron Mynd]

Wake up!

[The Realist]

Jek, my bad on taking so long to reply...

Jek, i dont know if you always use the similar style as cam but if you dont normally, dont anymore. It really didnt come off well with him right behind your verse. This isnt a flaw on your part but its like banks trying to put punchlines on a song with chino xl following him.

None the less, i like the weed flip but, IMO, it didnt come across well. My dumb ass never assumed you meant weed so it seemed to just be about a girl the whole time, so the spiderman at the end actually threw me off. Stupid me!

None the less, good job from both!

[Foreshadow]

lol I get the concept of this piece it is from spiderman 2 when PP reads all that poetry its good that you 2 wrote something like this because it is funny. At first I thought that you guys were talking about weed because jek said he it makes him stronger watching you grow or something like that but dope collab.

[Baron Mynd]

It was about weed, well .. It was supposed to amke the reader THINK it was about wed initially, but then with another flip to it at the end. We're both Marvel fans, and, yes Fore - I got the idea from PP reading the poetry in the film ..

Props on being the most observant. :^)

[H dot Skys]

Howe can you NOT like a rhyme scheme? Lol. Half the kids here dont use one anyway, so be thankful we even take the time to use something few actually pick up on ..
The break up of lines is simply, my style. Helps empthasise the multis if nothing more, its easy to read through and gives the reader a better sense of when to pause etc ..
Lol at us having the same style .. I usually write like that, guess he just switched his up - which, is more so a credit to Jeks. The flow to this is dope, reads really smoothly - not sure how you didnt catch it, try reading through again. Lol.

Baron Calm Down Familia. . . Anyway do u got any kind of Messaging ConTact?

Ight Well i liked this alot.. I Read it Awhile ago but could neva respond. It was one of your Better pieces Baron. The Flow, the structure everyhting was flawless.. Dope Shit B.Mynd