Check it OUT!

[ThE kId BiG]

yo, i make hitz and you waste nice beats
ill mentally destroy you... make you turn white like my bed sheets
im the new NUTORIOUS
dumbass, you mistaked weed for clitoria
dont you realize, youre in a state of moria
that means menthal lethargy
haha, and you tought you were gonna get by me
watch what you say and think about what you said
remember comments is free but facts are sacred
i got nothing to loose, so dont even try and dont decrie
youre rhymes are overrated, even you realize youre dry
its a habbit, its what you live by
you couldved been my friend, but now youre my foe
after the embarresment, ima dip you in floe
touched youre gun and said its about time
show youres and ill show mine

anybody like this? plls kept on telling me to use better words, well i did... you probably dont know what they mean but ill post it:


DEFENITIONS:

NUTORIOUS-BIGGIE
clitoria-tropical shrubs or vines
moria- Dullness of mind
menthal lethargy-^
decry- To condemn openly
foe-personal Enermy
floe-snow, or frozen water

ill post my links in 5... holla back

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175911
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...18#post2147018

[sexi_dominicana]

OMG that shit was HOT... funny too... i like it... props... nice rhymes, and i love how you mentioned biggie in there, that made a big difference to me for some reason.. lol anyway... nice!!!

[ThE kId BiG]

^^ thankx... anyone else?

[UnlikeNest]

you killed em good shit, play boi

[CRonCrack]

thats shit was some serious fire for real son them words were unique n different n then you explained them n it all came together too cuz to tell u the truth i never heard of ne of those words but this was all yours truthfully

[ThE kId BiG]

^^ thankx to all... ne 1 else?

[CRonCrack]

yo check this home boy still tryin to get at you son this shit is hilarious to me i think i want to battle him

[ThE kId BiG]

^ yo, who won the other one ''diss to kid big''

[ThE kId BiG]

uppin...^^

[ThE kId BiG]

^uppin^

[ThE kId BiG]

uppin'... ANYONE ELSE?

[CrazyCarl]

Work on editing your lines a little to straighten out your flow. Try to work in vocab to your context, you don't have to rhyme those words. People say up your vocab, just try and use words that better describe what you want to say. Small, basic words are usually general and may not get your message across.
Thanks for checking out my open mic.

[ThE kId BiG]

^ youre welcome and thankx for the feed... anybody else?

[Watch Kalien]

who whut,,tha deal is,,you nigs got tha hosters cream feillin,,,,firm to tha rotten,,ya mik and ya top to bottoms,schedule to tha battery cable,,involve to tha experienced,i'll extirpate to tha charms,,dont get mad at me dogg,,if i take ya fascinaten out of ya chains record clames and pendant,,i'll mug and mugg till i steal ya costume and ya raps origin,,exterminate to tha weed out i remove,,passionate to tha melodrama,,mystery to tha fairy tale and color,,amorous no bitches yall like @ "in_ loven color",,,

[ThE kId BiG]

uppin...