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  1. March 5th, 2005, 10:30 AM #1
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    Anticipation

    Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
    I'm fearin what I really don't know

    All this tension in me is now built up inside
    extra attention to how my thoughts divide
    is applied, to who can I truly confide
    to end all of my stored anticipation
    I need to do more than simply waiting
    I'm going insane as my mind's creating
    added strain is put on as I'm debating
    what it is that I should plan to do next
    looking at possibilities from all aspects
    but to my dismay I'm surprised to find
    that everyday I seem to be inclined
    to dwell incessively on the negative
    not successfully find a way to live
    but still, until this event finally occurs
    I will, not be able to clear my mind's blurs
    feelings from thought to action transfers

    Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
    I'm fearin what I really don't know

    when the experience is over, I feel an emotional release
    my anticipation decrease gives me a certain inner piece
    that can only be achieved through my own goal completion
    having not believed in yourself leads to self-control depletion
    now that is over, I go back to working on life's other problems
    along the way keeping track of how I was able to solve them
    make sure I learn my lesson, not the same mistake twice
    I just seem to be pressin, to have my decisions be concise
    take this verse as a blessin, and I hope you use this advice
    you shouldn't be stressin over the mind's defensive device
    that is to try to start messin with your thoughts only to entice
    you to start obsessin, when what you already have will suffice

    Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
    I'm fearin what I really don't know
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  2. March 5th, 2005, 10:35 AM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175375
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  3. March 5th, 2005, 01:24 PM #3
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    Good Shitt Homie....That Wuz Nice... Your Rhymes Were Sick, And The Wording Fitt Well.... Keep It Up.... ~*.One Love.*~
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  4. March 5th, 2005, 02:29 PM #4
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    I definitely was digg'n diss hrrr, had vry nice wrdplay, went straight @ ur topic, & did ya thang,


    keep it up.........

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  5. March 5th, 2005, 04:03 PM #5
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    Good shit kid....i was feelin it, great flow, and structure, Yu have alot of great potential.....but great job man...return the fava on ma sig
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  6. March 6th, 2005, 10:56 AM #6
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    liked the way the words flow, and how you repeated the couple of lines that you did throughout the post. it was nice, i liked the end when you say what you have will suffice, kinda ends the post smoothly, good job
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  7. March 6th, 2005, 12:35 PM #7
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    luv it, dat deep shyt dawg. i would love to see some more of yea flow'z
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  8. March 6th, 2005, 02:35 PM #8
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    only thing you had was rhymes... waht happened to multies? punch lines.. etc... its ok though
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  9. March 6th, 2005, 03:38 PM #9
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    nice shit bro.liked the flow,good structure on the piece.olso ya had some good worldplay and some good ideas,not like others sell crack,kill ya,fuck ya,where my bitches at,ya know?keep it up!
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  10. March 6th, 2005, 09:25 PM #10
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    I like this quite a bit man, lots of very good vocab strutted around the verse and I love that; a very good subject, one that "good" human beings otta be able to understand having lived any sort of life in this country; Keep writing the fresh shit, that's what I like to see.

    Oh, and so I give you something to work on, I think that you just need to reword some of your lines a bit to keep it flowing, it sounds a little forced at times even though the basic rhyme scheme does a good job; at some points the poetry leaks through and dissolves the rap, which isn't what you want since it's supposed to be vocalized and listened to, not read.

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    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."
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  11. March 7th, 2005, 02:17 PM #11
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    1st verse, topic sounds good, something new. multis were good.. emotion was there, i dunno lines seemed a bit to short here, but that might just be me.. got creative with the lines..
    2nd verse, lines got longer. was a more detailin verse, had good multis. again, the emotion was good. i like the last 4 lines, but yeah this was a good drop.. the little hook fit it perfect. nice drop!
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  12. March 7th, 2005, 02:28 PM #12
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    this is good, real good

    rtn the fb:

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  13. March 7th, 2005, 06:52 PM #13
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    *all links have been returned*
    keep the feedback coming
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  14. March 8th, 2005, 11:54 AM #14
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    Flow was good and the feeling was nice to - how it built up. I hav
    e no clue what you were talking about. The second verse made me think it was sex/orgasm but the first stanza turns me another way. Maybe I'm just slow. :-/
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  15. March 8th, 2005, 11:56 AM #15
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    PS. Boooo@the big kid. Crazy, you shouldn't have returned the favor. That fuck didn't even read your verse.
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