An Army of Angels

[UnknownSoldier]

They Come Straight From The Burrows, In The Land Of The Kings //
At Top Speeds, They Fly High .. Expanding They're Wings //
Storming Down From God's Kingdom .. Hevenly Charmed //
Soaring Through The Sky, Each One .. Heavily Armed //
They Gott Grenades, Machine Guns and Knives in They Boots //
Dressed in Military Out-Fits, Like Camoflauge Suits //
An Infantry Of Angels Answer Only To GOD //
Compoused Of The Finest Soldiers .. An Infinite Squad //
A Golden Haylo Shines Bright, Gleeming Over They're Head //
Searching For Lost Souls, Screeming Out To The Dead //
Communicating Through A Sercret Code, Nott Heard By Your Ears //
No Emotion On Their Face, Jus The Tatooed Tears //
Some Angels Die Young, Some Loose or Pungture A Lung //
Some Gett Hitt By A Bullet, While Reloading They're Gun //
Some Don't Die Right Away, But Instead Eternally Bleed //
These Angels Try To Save Us From Misfortune and Greed //
An Army Of Angels Came Down To Shed Some Light //
And Make Something So Wrong .. Feel Oh So Right //
Its A Never Ending Battle Between Life And Death //
The Angels Came To Visit .. Sacrificing They're Breath //

----- Any FeedBack is Very Apprieciated....

~*.Stay Up.*~
~*.ONE LOVE.*~

[WhiteNoise]

yo that was some ill shit bro..........i thought this was a VERY good piece, really good rhyme.........pretty good structure..........overall VERY nice drop...............i enjoyed reading that very much indeed...............

[FoKuZ]

Hey i read dis like 5 times noww shittt dats sick bruv gonna check out sum of ur utha shittt
Keep it locked~


edit: haha first post...

[Hall]

tyte shit keep doin ur thing i like the whole concept that u chose creative keep it up ~1~

[Spoken Deity]

not a bad peace
I recognise some of the shit from an Immortal Technique song but I think its way different
good drop, very far from whack

[warchild]

I thought this was a tight verse the concept was dope but i think you could of wrote more than just a verse on this it could of made a dope song.
The structure vocab were fine youve got a nice flow so the verse was just dope but next time write a bit more than one verse.

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[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[CrazyCarl]

You had good vocab thoughout the verse. I liked the topic, you were descriptive, and went in depth. You could have written another verse, however, and added a chorus to make it a more complete piece.
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