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    Ezekiel 25:17...

    I speak for Ezekiel, who’ll be 25 on the 17th…
    Because I’m on the brink of unleashing my strength.
    See, the righteous men I know, their path is so beset…
    The selfish supply iniquities without supplying regret…
    And evil men throw tyranny where their feet will tread.

    Blessed is he who shepherds them, call it good will, charity…
    Through the valley of darkness so they can finally be free.
    They need someone who’ll keep his brothers, at any cost…
    Someone who’ll find all the children that’ve since been lost.
    Let me be the one who strikes down upon those evil men…
    With great vengeance and furious anger, I’ll strike again and again.
    Those who attempt to poison and destroy my brothers will find truth…
    And will know my name is the Lord when I lay my vengeance upon you.

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    topic was ok, but I feel you could have done more with this. a lot of it is coming off as word for word....rhymescheme was a lil off but the emotion was definitely felt in the piece. keep elevating.

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    Topic was good, original..... was nice and creative, it could 've been longer though...was feelin the emotion, flow was nice, vocab was there.. overal this was a good peice... nice drop!

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    this was cool you are now one of my favorite writers on here. took long enough. i liked this peace. the angel you took was pretty original for the topic. i would have liked to see it a little longer. it started a little slow for me also. i dunno it was cool overall just had a slow start. it seemed like the rhyme scheme was a bit too simple. you may have done that to let the lines sink in more without speeding the read up too much. i dunno. it was cool but i was expecting a little more from you. good overall, but i expect greatness from you everytime now. look what you have done to yourself.lol

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    It was good but I liked that other one u did better
    Ryme and vocab in this were good
    I liked the last 2 lines the best
    Keep posting ur cool mics

    Hey hit this one up, i worked hard on it
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174913

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    This was a nice piece not as nice as your last drop though i think if this verse was longer id have more to say about it.
    There was a good concept in the verse and i think you did a good job with it the structure vocab and flow were all fine so i aint got nothing to hate on except i thought you should of made it longer.

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    i thought this drop was tight but it was too short... vocab and structure was good... and so was the content. id like to see something longer by you.

    Keep reppin

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    Decent shit, born. Is that last part the quote from pulp fiction?
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    it was a good topic, as was said started off slow for me, but was diggn the concept,
    it was simple reading to, would of like to see more wordplay, but overall i was feelin it.

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    Blessed is he who shepherds them, call it good will, charity…
    Through the valley of darkness so they can finally be free.
    They need someone who’ll keep his brothers, at any cost…
    Someone who’ll find all the children that’ve since been lost.
    Let me be the one who strikes down upon those evil men…
    With great vengeance and furious anger, I’ll strike again and again.
    Those who attempt to poison and destroy my brothers will find truth…
    And will know my name is the Lord when I lay my vengeance upon you.

    ^coo.

    Did you just feel like stopping? This was short and sweet. I guess. Pretty cool drop. It was original, but most of pieces are original. Can't really say anymore.

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